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Please don't let my baby die,
he is starving...so am I,
in your homes so safe and sure
please...will you not help the poor?
I beg,
don't turn your eyes away,
without YOU he may die today.
I hold his little body near,
it is so close to death,I fear.
There is no water I can give,
please,
reach out and help him live.
The flies are swarming on our pain,
there is no food,there is no rain.
I have no better place to go,
no way to save him here,and so
please,
don't let my baby die,
wont you help him?
wont you try?
I fear perhaps it is too late,
I have NO hope if you should wait.
His breath is shallow on my ear,
I have no strength to shed a tear.
Please...
don't let my baby die
but IF you do...
'why? why?
Oh,why?'
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The compasion in your heart undoubtedly gave power to your creative talent to enable you to write a poem such as this. Had you not signed it I would have believed it came from the lips of the African mother, who is the persona of your poem.
You should send this one to World Vision or Save The Children Fund, or even an appropriate UN agency!
From a technical point of view, the free verse form of the poem and the literary tool of effective, forceful repetition results in a sharing of your emotions with the reader, a most desirable aim in all good poetry. Where it is handled with skill (as in this case)it will usually enhance the dynamic effect of free verse.
Brava! and best wishes from this Sandgroper to a talented Banana-bender. (I live in Australia's best kept secret, beautiful Albany on WA's Rainbow Coast.)
Felt in the core of my painful hert
Bless you for this Well Penned composition
William .....Peace
Reindeer
ty for this
u are an evolved human spirit.........as we should all aspire to be.
pax A
If the world could open its eyes, what would it really see?
in what most take as a simple pleasure
it is happening here too...cry into the darkness
all-time
great job!!!
I leaves us helpless over here, at the other side of the world, not really understanding how people can starve while we just walk over to the fridge to get us a cold drink.
What can we actually do to help these millions of poor people in the third world?
Love yah for this
Ch'erie
Pity the Govt skim off the top!
We in America are guilty of over eating...shame on us...
You are a special poet Kay.........
the wealth get wealthier, and the poor get poorer...the hungry die...the thirsty die...the sick die...such suffering, and it could be helped
thank you for posting this, may we never become complacent and think it won't ever happen--because it can, and does
(((((HUGS))))) and love, karla. :(
Carmen :-)
Love Tinka
May God be with you !!
Peter Paton
Aid we give their govt' keeps.
Looking at it objectivly, like from an aliens view point, how absurd, one world, 2/3 starving.
Susan
This is another of your fantastic compassionate
poems that will hopefully be heard.Prayers are most needed
besides financial help. Both are things we can do!
~ Sandie May Angel a.k.a. May Lu ~