Blackened Veil (poem) by SHERRY G HEIM on AuthorsDen

Reviewed by Biri Amante (Reader)

Reviewed on September 16, 2005

Such a wasted life, when money takes precedence over true love!
A very well written poem, Sherry.

Reviewed by Mark Mahoney (Reader)

Reviewed on September 4, 2005

A great write that hammers home its message, sad but alas so very true...take care...Mark x

Reviewed on August 27, 2005

Empty promises paint her life

More of a whore than a loving wife

To his wealth she clings for security

Though their marriage long lacks its purity

Sad but very true write Sherry....wonderful....very very realistic write...love n luck....BHUWAN!!

Reviewed by Ronald Hull

Reviewed on August 21, 2005

Sounds like a true story. Ahieves a dark mystery well. A novel in the making?

Ron

Reviewed by Nordette Adams

Reviewed on August 16, 2005

Whazzup, Sherry? :-) Yep, some men want wives as trophies and decorations, just another possession. They don't have a clue about what love is, and the wives themselves will take the abuse at first for the sake of being Mrs. John WhoopDeDoo III and having financial security, later because they've lost all sense of self. You've got a chilling write here, Sherry. Lady A is correct. It could be a song. ~~Nordette

Reviewed by Chanti Niven

Reviewed on August 14, 2005

An all too common theme but expressed in an uncommon way. You have the gift Sherry and you use it so well. Great write!
Chanti

Reviewed by A PAX

Reviewed on August 14, 2005

this is so on target
so sad and authentic
would make an awsome cw song.........
many.....sadly......would relate........
but perhaps it would caution others not to allow this to happen to them.....to have more pride.....both partners.........

ahhh such is life
great writing as always.............pax A
:)

Reviewed by Thomas Lanechanger (Reader)

Reviewed on August 12, 2005

Sherry, if at any time within a relationship were it becomes based on �empty promises,� for one to wear the �blackened veil� is such a terrible price to pay to remain in it. I am sure, as many have pointed out on your board that they too, have unfortunately known of such a relationship between two people. One could easily debate the whys and whatnots, yet is it really worth the emptiness or loneliness? I say, �definitely not!� An extremely important reminder why it is so important to be totally honest with ones partner at all times. I�ve always said, �communication plays such a vital role and I truly believe is the master key to sustaining any type of long-lasting and/or maintaining a happy relationship.� It�s wonderful to read your outstanding work once again. Thank you for sharing it. Take good care and be well Poet.

Reviewed by Mark Rockeymoore

Reviewed on August 11, 2005

wow...i wonder what this kind of life is like...which is the hallmark of great poetry...bringing others a viewpoint so far away from their reality and making it poignant and meaningful. thank you for sharing, poet.

Reviewed by ~Indigo~ Elga

Reviewed on August 10, 2005

Dear Sherry,

Sometimes the fear of rejection plays a huge role, although there is no excuse for this behaviour, it is sad, degrading and demoralizing. Exceptionally well written Sherry.

Warm hugs
Elga

Reviewed by OnepoetGem *the Poetic Rapper

Reviewed on August 9, 2005

Hello sweet cherry, super

Reviewed by Vesna Perkovic (Reader)

Reviewed on August 5, 2005

Indeed ..you have nailed it well..the result of making a wrong choice..it afterall boils down to just THAT a 'choice'..I know about this.. one of my friends lives this life and she has no DESIRE to leave..weird huh?..actually it's fear ..nothing but FEAR!

Exceptional write..brava!

Vesna*

Reviewed by William Bonilla

Reviewed on August 3, 2005

A Well Penned
Excellent write
of a sad subject
most enjoyable reading

William ......Peace & Love

Reviewed by Peter Paton

Reviewed on August 2, 2005

Very poignant and true account for many woman today , especially those
places where women are treated like serfs and baby fodder
"Where are the children that she had been promised
A husband and father a life that was honest "

Powerful write Sherry
Peter

Reviewed by Regis Auffray

Reviewed on August 1, 2005

Sad, Sherry; but the truth if often sad. Well-expressed and shared. Thank you. Love and peace to you. Regis

Reviewed by Pacific Ink (Reader)

Reviewed on August 1, 2005

Very powerful and so well stated, Sherry!

Pacific

Reviewed by Kate Burnside

Reviewed on August 1, 2005

Ths sickens me to my gut as there can be nothing more condemning than an empty love relationship - however it comes about. It creates a howling and burning internal desert that no amount of (alcoholic!!) oases can bring to life again. The inner life becomes a mirage. You nailed this one good and proper, Sherry; reminds me of the Rolling Stones "Paint It Black". Dust and ashes, weeping, wailing and knashing of teeth are in this one! Very well done. TY Kate xx

Reviewed by Handsum Hart

Reviewed on July 31, 2005

Excellent!!!!!!
Sad, yet penned in much a fine manner.

Take care
HH

Reviewed by Huda Orfali

Reviewed on July 31, 2005

Very powerful and sad truth
Well done, Sherry

Reviewed by Abdi-Noor Mohamed (Eagle Of Hope)

Reviewed on July 31, 2005

Sherry I Can't really describe in words how eloquently you have penned this poem. This is like a mirror of truth which every huband should stand in front of it to know the identity of his matrimomial image. If men were taken to court I'm sure 90% would be found guilty of committing such ugly offences. Sherry I'm these days visiting Nairobi leaving my wife in Mogadishu but right now, right after finishing this review I shall call my wife to make sure that I CARE. As Tinka said this is a sad write.

Reviewed by Tinka Boukes

Reviewed on July 31, 2005

Painfully sad write Sherry....something I can relate to!!

Love Tinka

Reviewed by Paul Williams

Reviewed on July 31, 2005

A powerfully sad write Sherry, but one that sadly is all too real for some women...excellent

Paul;-)

Reviewed by Mr. Ed

Reviewed on July 31, 2005

Extremely sad, Sherry, and I think a fairly common modern day phenomenon.

Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader)

Reviewed on July 31, 2005

Happens all the time, and the opposite is prevalent also. If people are lucky, and it is luck in many cases, they find someone that will love them as they give love in return. "To his wealth she clings for security." When women marry for the wrong reasons sometimes the price they must pay is horrendous. Good poem.

Reviewed by Felix Perry

Reviewed on July 31, 2005

This one is so true of so many marraiges and relationships and you have captured it so real that it is almost painful and makes one have to look at and evaluate our own relationships. Very moving write.

Felix

Reviewed by Retta (Reindeer) Mckenzie

Reviewed on July 31, 2005

Oh Sherry, so powerfully written, this is so very poignant, excellently written,

Reindeer

Reviewed by George Carroll

Reviewed on July 31, 2005

A wake up call to all who find themselves in a loveless marriage. A poignant poem on deception and its consequences. Done in marvelous rhyme and meter.

Reviewed by jude forese

Reviewed on July 31, 2005

pretenses of the heart are like plastic gems ...

excellent message, Sherry ...

Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)

Reviewed on July 31, 2005

How many fall into the baited trap.
A life wasted, to be sure.
It happens the other way too.
Pretending to love the same things, ie nature, castles, history, lit,
then bang married and it's shopping x 6756956445.
But we can wake up, go grab life, with a partner, or alone.
I went on a femanimal sabatical, to find out what I really wanted in life.

Unforced rhyme with a powerful message...

Reviewed by Sandra Mushi

Reviewed on July 31, 2005

Ooh yeah, don't we all know these kind of relationships! The diamond glitter woos the woman, once she is in she realises - when its too late - thats she had been attracted to the wrong things all along. Money, status, names etc ... blackened veil. Wonderful write, Sherry!

God bless,

Sandie.

Reviewed by Andre Bendavi ben-YEHU

Reviewed on July 30, 2005

A clear depicting of the majority of marriages in our today's
society. "Blackened Veil" flows on to awareness lake.

Outstanding writing in contents and poetic tasks.

Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU

Reviewed by Lori Moore

Reviewed on July 30, 2005

I would hate to be worn. Excellent!

Reviewed by E T Waldron

Reviewed on July 30, 2005

A lot more of this kind of relationship than we will ever know.

You describe it perfectly Sherry, I knew several marriages just

like this, and even more arrangements. Surprisingly I don't think

the feminist movement effected this kind of relationship at all.

Che Sera Sera...it is what it is...Sad to say... Superb write!

Love,

Eileen