The Holy Dove (poem) by Chels Duncan on AuthorsDen

The Holy Dove
by Chels Duncan → (All Poetry by Chels Duncan)
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I worte this when i was at my lowest. My friend had been the victim of domestic violence and she saw a way to get free. this is dedicated to her the true survivor.
The Holy Dove As his fist collides with my chin All I know is that I cannot win. My baby sleeps on upstairs Tucked away in the land of the bears. I hear a sound As I fall to the ground. I see her on the stairs Not that he cares. He carries on Until the light has gone. Maybe I have won Now we would only have fun. She sits and cries His fist flies. Dragged down by her hair I thought he used to care. She whimpers and whines He makes her write lines One mistake The miss-spelling of the word lake. He punches her on the chin The neighbours hear the din. And still they glare Gossipers greet Why did she bring this to our street? The don’t care about my girl They stand and watch as our despair does unfurl One moment of peace of love Before I see the holy dove Come to rescue us from the hell All bad memories left at the well.

Reviewed by Georg Mateos

Reviewed on March 13, 2010

Welcome to AD, hope your work inspire others to share, to make this site a home.

Georg

Reviewed by Karen Palumbo

Reviewed on February 10, 2010

How well you capture what so many women suffer silently until they realize there is a better way...

Be always safe,
Karen

Reviewed by Regis Auffray

Sadly, your poem deals with a much too common theme in this world/life, Chels. Your verses are most compelling. Welcome to AD. Love and best wishes to you,

Regis

Reviewed by L. Figgins

You have perception beyond your years. The abuser beats down the victim until they believe that they deserve the abuse and usually they haven't the means or will to leave. The line about the baby being on the stairs and witnessing her mother's abuse is heartbreaking. A resounding cheer to your friend for having the courage to go!! She is lucky to call you "friend". You are a fine poet, young lady. Welcome!

Hugs, Lin

Reviewed by Amber Moonstone

Chels,
Welcome to AD, I can totally relate to this poem. I have been a victim of domestic violence (8 years ago). I am free and safe and healthy and happy. Tell your friend to leave, and never look back.
You write a very tender sad poem here, but one that will touch many of your readers.
I wish you peace, love, and light,
Amber "V"

Reviewed by Andy Turner

Such a painful penn.
Tight write, great rhyme and meter.
But the subject makes ones blood boil.
Very graphic visuals.
Great to see you on here young lady.
GTG, on the hoof...

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