Being Arrested (poem) by Edwin Hurdle on AuthorsDen

Reviewed on October 29, 2011

beautiful, I hope she gives you life without parole,
Regards, Steve.

Reviewed on August 3, 2009

You crake me up! That is the cutest poem I have ever read! Again I have a suggestion. Take the "can't" and make it a "can". You say "No jail cell of any kind "can't" hold my feelings back"; by using "No" at the beginning of the sentence you are cancelling out the "not" of "can't". It will read easier" No jail cell of any kind (can or could)hold my feelings back". As I said, I am not in any way a better author than anyone else. I just give suggestions as others have given suggestions to me in the hopes of all of us getting better reviews from our "buying" public.

Peace to your Heart,
Lora

Reviewed by Dixie Dawn Michelle (Reader)

Reviewed on July 30, 2009

Wow! This was amazing, so insightful and clever! I truly enjoyed it, most impressive!

Reviewed by Chantilly Lace (Reader)

Reviewed on July 26, 2009

Wowwww. this was great writing sweet man enjoyed very much...keep smiling OK...Hugss

Reviewed by J'nia Fowler

Reviewed on July 24, 2009

Very clever and well put together Edwin. I enjoyed this. J'nia

Reviewed by Margaret Mullings

Reviewed on July 13, 2009

You made me laugh Edwin, laughter is good
for the heart! This is a delightful poem
and very refreshing! May God bless you and
continue to inspire you to write!

Love And Prayers
Always!

Reviewed by Nicole Weaver

Reviewed on July 5, 2009

Wow Edwin!!!
You are very talented. I really like the theme, ingenious way to write a very effective poem! You made your point loud and clear.
Nicole

Reviewed by Jms Bell

Reviewed on June 30, 2009

GREAT WRITE WITH YOUR UNIQUE CORRELATION PRODUCING CLEAR IMAGERY OF A MAN 'ARRESTED' BY LOVE. THANKS FOR SHARING AND BLESSINGS. JOYCE

Reviewed by Milton Handfield

Reviewed on May 15, 2009

Cleverly done any woman would fall for these lines.

Cheers
Milton

Reviewed by Stephanie Webb

Reviewed on April 23, 2009

Hi Edwin, how are you? This is really Beautiful! It makes me want to hear you sing it.

Thanks for this one
Steph

Reviewed by Carolyn Red Bear (The Bear Paw)

Reviewed on April 8, 2009

Hi Edwin, being a-rrested with this kind of law would be the perfect crime. I like this write, it flows like a song should. Thank you for sharing...

In Spirit,
Bear

Reviewed by Anna Glymph

Reviewed on March 9, 2009

I enjoyed this poem kind of a love lock up. Take care.

Anna

Reviewed by Tommy Thomas

Reviewed on February 23, 2009

Very, very Good. I remember when I first fell in love wanting the love of the one in return. I too felt like I was arrested and in Jail, locked away with no chances of parole. Outstanding poem,

Reviewed by Carey McWhorter (Reader)

Reviewed on February 10, 2009

Wow! great.

Reviewed by J.A. Aarntzen (Reader)

Reviewed on February 10, 2009

A lot of clever word play! I enjoyed it.

Reviewed by Joanna Leone

Reviewed on February 9, 2009

I'm your one and only soul inmate

"The law is being in love with you

I will always break it to the fulliest extent to make you happy." Such beautiful words! I love the way you put this poem together, and your choice of words. Excellent poem!! Love it!

Reviewed by Jackson Aniefiok

Reviewed on February 5, 2009

nice poem, keep up.

Reviewed by David Clure

Reviewed on February 3, 2009

I got a feeling that someday I'll hear this on the TV or radio, Edwin. The idea and lyrical way you presented it are very catchy! Outstanding poem and one that's bound to inspire a melody...

-Zach

Reviewed by Ronald Hull

Reviewed on January 25, 2009

Very clever idea. Love the angst in it. I do hope you find someone to put music to it.

"Dang me, dang me, oughta take a rope and hang me....":

Ron

Reviewed by M Flack

Reviewed on January 20, 2009

Hey, nice twist. From the title, I at first guessed poem about something totally different. But the concept of being charged with falling in love in the first degree is fun. Well done...

Reviewed by Wander Powell

Reviewed on January 20, 2009

Very funny and romantic piece. Great use of words. You turned around a negative incident into something positive. Write on, write on.

Reviewed by Walt Hardester

Reviewed on January 16, 2009

It can feel so good it should be illegal.

~W~

Reviewed by Leysa Lowery

Reviewed on January 8, 2009

Really enjoyed this! My boyfriend often says that the love he feels for me must be illegal -- I'll share this one with him.

Reviewed by Mark Brown

Reviewed on January 8, 2009

I truly enjoyed "Being Arrested." Its sentiments are wonderful.
Best Regards,

J-me

Reviewed by Kimmy Van Kooten

Reviewed on January 8, 2009

Inmate are ya? LOL This is great and very unique in its creative...Well done Edwin!
Love and Peace~
Kimmy~

Reviewed by Sheri Uy

Reviewed on January 6, 2009

Hi Edwin, this is sooo romantic and cute. If i'd be arrested for falling in love, i'd have no need of an attorney 'coz i'll plead guilty right away! Beautiful song.

Be well,
Sheri

Reviewed by John Coppolella

Reviewed on January 5, 2009

Reminds me of little song called "Me and Bobby McGee,"

"Broke-down and busted in Baton-Rogue..."

Classic, Edwin "Star" Hurdle.

"War, what is it good for? Absolutely nothing, say it again!"
(The Lyric above is from the song 'War' by Edwin Starr.)

Rockie Coppolella

Reviewed by Shay White

Reviewed on January 5, 2009

Very sweet, you must have such a romantic soul. Thanks for sharing!

Reviewed by Sandie May Joyce

Reviewed on December 30, 2008

Edwin:

This song is so sweet and romantic!!!
Wonderful write!!!

Sandie Angel :o)

Reviewed by Melony Cooper

Reviewed on December 29, 2008

I really enjoyed this song. The concept is so unique.

Peace and Blessings
Melony

Reviewed by Denise Edwards

Reviewed on December 27, 2008

I love this, Edwin. It's very creative, being love arrested. These lines show you are the thief of hearts, committing a crime of deep passion. I enjoyed reading this, Edwin

warm hugs~~Denise

Reviewed by jude forese

Reviewed on December 24, 2008

unique story line ...

Reviewed by Michelle Kidwell Power In The Pen

Reviewed on December 21, 2008

This is well done, thank you for sharing, and thank you for your kind reviews
In Christs Love
Michelle~

Reviewed by Douglas Bentley

Reviewed on December 21, 2008

Love and arrest
Now that's a true test.
I'ld like to hear the music
That would let me get more out of it.
Doug

Reviewed by Lloyd Lofthouse

Reviewed on December 21, 2008

What an interesting spin on being arrested. Falling in love 'is sort of like' that--except it is much better than the real lock up. Why, I'd break the laws too if I could get arrested like that more often. But my wife wouldn't like that unless she was the only one arresting me. :o)

Reviewed by Elaine Carey

Reviewed on December 21, 2008

I would love to hear the musical version!

Reviewed by Dale Clark

Reviewed on December 20, 2008

That's the only law worth breaking
and 'being arrested' for ;) Great piece!

Reviewed by Cindy Tuttle

Reviewed on December 19, 2008

Edwin, That is GREAT!You were right. I do love it.

With love,
Cindy

Reviewed by John Domino

Reviewed on December 18, 2008

Creative, innovative, smart writing.

Loved it!

Reviewed by A PAX

Reviewed on December 18, 2008

this is great!!! its fun, and seductive........made me smile lol pax A

Reviewed by J. Pajot

Reviewed on December 18, 2008

This is great stuff, Edwin! A modern love poem...I like it. Want to thank you for your reviews of my works...hope to enjoy more of yours in the future as time permits. Be well, be happy,
Jim

Reviewed by Larry Lounsbury

Reviewed on December 17, 2008

I love this-This is so original!

Reviewed by Connie Faust

Reviewed on December 17, 2008

Seems like it would be a catchy song. I like it!
Connie

Reviewed by Jeanette Cooper

Reviewed on December 16, 2008

I agree with Robin--a new twist, but very innovative and interesting.

Reviewed by Robin Rice (Reader)

Reviewed on December 11, 2008

Now that is such a dynamic twist on Being Arrested...I like how you think...such great words...I can hear it in my mind...Music to the ears and nurturing for the soul.