I read this from work and couldn't comment...you changed the last stanza, but it is actually tighter and more poignant this way. Not to say the original didn't work, just that ending it with "ellipses" really "shows" the meaning. Very tight and concise!
Early Works is an exhaustive compilation of the first decade of the poems and stories of Z.B.McClure. Included are family photos, rare personal photos, photos of 1st draft manuscripts of many of his early poems. Also some biography and memoir materia
A further collection of poems, many from years in the Middle East, but also the California San Francisco and Central Coast areas (Santa Cruz, Carmel, Big Sur, Berkeley, etc.).
cleverly penned, Tracie ...
I read this from work and couldn't comment...you changed the last stanza, but it is actually tighter and more poignant this way. Not to say the original didn't work, just that ending it with "ellipses" really "shows" the meaning. Very tight and concise!
Elizabeth
Oh body language to me is a dead givaway!!
Love Tinka
Michael