This Ends Now (poem) by Brandi L. Wroblewski on AuthorsDen

This Ends Now
by Brandi L. Wroblewski → (All Poetry by Brandi L. Wroblewski)
Rated "G" by the Author.

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These hollow eyes can't stand to see the fully raged figure standing infront of me These shaking hands can't hold onto the shallow breaths that you drew A weak mind can't cope with a sick heart you can leave it at that or pick it all apart The fact of the matter still stands as it's said before you lose it, make sure your heads fed Cry waves clear eyes there's no realities don't lose your cool in the face of fatalities These long steady legs are growing sore keep running and maybe you'll escape the war These sickening aches from way down deep don't dare to scream, don't dare to sleep An open mouth can't make up for a closed mind show the world that we're to be defined You can't make it right if the choice is wrong we've been pushing and pulling for far too long Tell them they're crazy, but then what are you no one will follow if you can't follow through These quiet ears are absorbing every sound you must keep listening if you want to be found These heavy shoulders are sinking much faster if this doesn't end now, be prepared for disaster

Reviewed by Brandi Wroblewski

Reviewed on March 9, 2014

Thank you all! Karla, what I meant to express through that line was, so many people risk their lives for our freedom and a lot that die don't receive the full regocnition that they deserve. I never meant to imply that people do it to make a name for themselves. I'm very sorry for the confusion!

Reviewed by Edwin Hurdle

Reviewed on June 6, 2009

A well written poem,great work,take care

EDWIN

Reviewed by Regis Auffray

Reviewed on April 11, 2009

You write from your soul, Brandi. That's what I do unless I decide to "fake it." I am drawn in to understand what you express. Thank you. Love and best wishes,

Regis

Reviewed by Marge Fulton

Reviewed on November 8, 2008

Brandi...
The courage is in you. Don't give up the fight! You give rhymed poetry such meaning. Have you thought of writing songs?
Marge Fulton

Reviewed by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner

Reviewed on November 7, 2008

Several things stood out: your impeccable rhyming, for one. :) But, that being said,

" ... You can't make it right if the choice is wrong
We've been pushing and pulling for far too long ... "

tells me that we need to take care of our own before trying to police the rest of the world - am I right?

And,

" ... risking your life for an 'honorable mention' ...."

We don't sign our names, raise our hands, don the uniform, serve our country to be recognized. We do it because we want to. As the daughter/sister/niece/cousin of Veterans, as well as a USAF Veteran myself, I followed in my heroes footsteps. Still, it would be nice if those whose orders we've followed would say, "Thank you" and keep promises made.

Thank you for penning this one.

(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.