dissonance most severe
the Sun is lured into orbit round the Moon
Screams of pain, hurt protestation of terrible crimes
The sun is in orbit round the Moon!
The Moon screams too hot, too violent, stop …AAAAAAAAh!
Aggression most vile au secours! HELP!
witness All, the criminal Sun
come ye all men, all women and testify
come ye all judges and verify
How he wantonly inflicts damage and hurt by heat and senseless eruptions
shrink Sun, evil Sun
selfish one,
shrink into culpable guilt, behave yourself and cool down
denounce your selfishness
denounce this damaging fire and unpredictable explosion, behave and cool down
……………….
When the new ice age prevails
and the infertile Moon fails
Let us get together for to weep and wail the insoluble calamity,
this unnatural dissonance most severe
the Sun has been captured,
lured into orbit round the Moon!
Copyright 2003 Tarek Ali Hassan
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Reviewed by Nicole Davis Vergara (Reader)
Reviewed on September 4, 2003
Oustanding work Tarek that leaves much open for discussion and debate! KUDOS My Friend!
~Nikki~
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~Nikki~
This poem is a thought's developer piece.
A very impressive composition that instructs and strikes the mind.
I would like to be allowed to suggest a revision for the last two lines of the penultimate Stanza.
I thank You.
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
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Best,
Nevine Al Seidi