Sugar Castles In The Rain (poem) by SHERRY G HEIM on AuthorsDen

Sugar Castles In The Rain
by SHERRY G HEIM → (All Poetry by SHERRY G HEIM)
Not rated by the Author.

Save

If the music doesn’t start automatically, and you wish to hear it, please click on the play arrow or button then adjust the volume to your own preference.

Sugar Castles In The Rain We built sand castles on the beach With every setting sun The miracle of our first love Turned each sandy mass Into a glorious sugar castle We believed would last Through all eternity Our hearts were certain and bold Each day we built another castle To add to our paper doll world We placed gargoyles at the gates To guard our starry fantasies From the dangers of sun-filled days and youthful hearts As we sealed our castles with our dreams We were children, our lives an uncharted path Our bodies tanned, hair bleached by the sun We swam with dolphins Howled at the moon Gathered shells along the shore To adorn the fragile walls of our tiny home We lived our days within our private dream With autumn came the rain The fantasy world we had built Began to crumble and sag Liquid puddles upon the sand The days had grown short, summer gone We watched our castles melt into the sea Taking with them our dreams of forever love The years have stolen my youth and quenched my dreams I walk along the beach A scavenger, searching for a sugary spire One perfect shell to color my world I long for the honey-sweetness of summer past As I feel the sting of the sun upon my leathering flesh I inhale the salty air, infused with memories of hope I read you had passed away last week; that you never married Gone to sugar castles in the sky I wonder as I walk If you recall that summer And the first love of our youth I press my feet deep into the sand In the very place we first made love I sense your closeness and melt into the glory of that summer in the sun Sherry Gail Heim September 29, 2007 Copyright © Sherry Gail Heim 2007
Homepage: http://www.authorsden.com/sherrygailheim

Reviewed by Sheila Roy

Reviewed on December 17, 2008

A deeply poignant write. I like the way you use the imagery to tell the story and show time passing. Nicely penned and very original. Sad & reflective at the end~
Sheila

Reviewed by Liana Margiva

Reviewed on April 15, 2008

MOST BEAUTIFUL POEM!!!!!!!!!!!!! YOUR WORDS TOUCHED MY HEART!!!!!!!!! MAY GOD BLESS YOU FOR THIS BEAUTY!!!!!!!!!!!!! Liana Margiva

Reviewed by Gloria Buono

Reviewed on March 28, 2008

Tis always better to have love and lost then to not have love at all. This is an awesome prose and so vivid and imaginative with so much coming from the heart. God Bless you. Thanks for sharing. Gloria

Reviewed by Ronald Hull

Reviewed on October 17, 2007

So personal. The fragile passions of youth that had no substance except memory.

Ron

Reviewed by Ron (sketchman) Axelson (Reader)

Reviewed on September 30, 2007

Lovely as is sad..
Stay safe Sherry...

Reviewed by Tinka Boukes

A bittersweet offering!!

Love Tinka

Reviewed by Mr. Ed

A truly powerful, sad, and bittersweet poem, Sherry, worth several reads. Life truly does wash away many of the youthful sand castles we thought would last forever.

Reviewed by William Bonilla

A heart felt write Sherry
excellently presented
Peace be with you

William

Reviewed by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner

Reviewed on September 29, 2007

A poignant rememberance, Sherry, exquisitely penned and felt. Well done. *Welcome home, I've missed you*

(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.

Reviewed by Karen Vanderlaan

i feel a lot of power in this write as well as longing and a sweet, sad rememberance

Reviewed by Karen Palumbo

Love the picturesque scene with the sand castle! I have built many over the years and they always seem to fulfill dreams and hopes and soothe the aching soul. This piece is a delight and though your friend has moved on to God's home your memories shared will live on....

Be safe,
Karen

Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)

Oh my how sad, yet sweet....
Though it does show, we never know when we are going to go.
Things mean nowt. Makes one realise our mortality in this beautiful life, with its pains and strains...
Gotta live to the full, in 20 years 50% on Ad will be gone to....

Reviewed by Felix Perry

Sherry this is for sure one of the best reflections I have read and the images you used in the overall mathaphor were perfect...I felt the bittersweet longing of feelings that nagged the question...What if? Wonderful write indeed and good to see you posting again.

Hugs
FEe

Reviewed by Christine Alwin

Sugar Castles in the Rain,, This poem took my breath away.

Reviewed by Charles Keller

Sweet and poignant. Very nice.

Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader)

You aced this one, my friend . . .

Reviewed by Kathy Armijo

Sugar castles in the rain - the title says it ALL, but the verse fills in the blanks of a love so young and melting away. This touches my heart in so many ways, that I can't help but feel melancholy and nostalgic.

Kathy

Reviewed by Regis Auffray

A very moving and meaningful write, Sherry; the metaphorical tone is most effective. Thank you. Love and best wishes,

Regis

Reviewed by Karen Lynn Vidra, The Texas Tornado

Sherry, this is absolutely gorgeous! Very well done; brava!

(((HUGS))) and much love, your Tx. friend, Karen Lynn. :D

Saving this one! :)

Reviewed by Lew Duffey

A beautiful write about young love.
God Bless,
Lew

Reviewed by E T Waldron

Oh my Sherry, you have me in tears with this one! Eloquent exquisite poetry! A love story/poem that rivals any I've read! Beautiful work!

Love,
Eileen

Reviewed by Ann Scarborough

Very beautiful, so beautiful it made me cry!
Well done!
Love,
annie

Reviewed by Jeanette Cooper

This is one of the most beautiful and poignant love poems I've read. You wrote it so beautiful that it truly captivated my attention to the last word. You get first prize from me.

Reviewed by Susan de Vegter

Castles are similarities to our hopes and dreams. Without dreams and without dreams we have nothing.
Susan