One Last Try (poem) by Erica Ivory on AuthorsDen

Reviewed on August 30, 2003

Having been an abused child myself, I know what a hell it can be. I also know
that there's mostly no way to "make it better". Life has a way of killing our dreams,
but it seldom gives us much to replace them with. I found that I could put all that
behind me though, and so should you. It does no good to dwell on what can't be
changed.

Reviewed by Susan Barton (Reader)

Reviewed on August 6, 2003

You absolutely poured yourself out with this. Very powerful words. SueB

Reviewed by serenety L (Reader)

Reviewed on August 6, 2003

I can feel the pain inside you. I know how difficult it is to cope with those feelings, overcome them. Some manage, some don't.
I wish you luck
S

Reviewed by na na (Reader)

Reviewed on August 5, 2003

Erica, you pull at our hearts nad souls with this poem. Your pain comes through and we want to reach out to you. But you know that this is in the past. It cannot be this way today. You have come so far and your poetry has been reflecting this. Keep looking forward and taking one step at a time and living life one day at a time. We are all here for you. Your friend Bill

Reviewed by Dale Clark

Reviewed on August 5, 2003

So haunting and powerful in its sadness.

Reviewed by Nancy D.

Reviewed on August 5, 2003

A pain so real, well done.

Nancy

Reviewed by Digital Fairy

Reviewed on August 5, 2003

*sigh*

I felt this entirely... such a strong write, spoke to my heart... great job :)

--Karissa

Reviewed by William Bonilla

Reviewed on August 5, 2003

An erxcellent write

William

Reviewed by Russ Okamura (Reader)

Reviewed on August 4, 2003

This is truly a masterful work of passionate poetry. It grabs one inside the very soul and does not let go. Very awesome is your artistry.

Reviewed by Lady Peg (Reader)

Reviewed on August 4, 2003

OH ERICA!!!!!!!!!!!
"Dreams of making you love
someone like me.
The wounds opened
Bled for years..
Turning my heart anemic..
Dizzy
with childish want
with childish need
Emotions nonexistent
A face like a mask..
with no substance..
A heart with no
way in..
Afraid of you.."
;(
PJ

Reviewed by Sara Coslett

Reviewed on August 4, 2003

Erica, other than what is going on in this poem, I hope you are doing well. I can tell this was a very painful write for you. I hope it works out.
~Sara

Reviewed by E T Waldron

Reviewed on August 4, 2003

very beautiful poignant write. this hurts!

Reviewed by Sandie May Joyce (Sandie Angel)

Reviewed on August 4, 2003

Erica:

A very sad write. It is so powerful, I can feel for you.

Sandie Angel a.k.a. May Lu :o)

Reviewed by Debby Rosenberg

Reviewed on August 4, 2003

a house of pain - intensly painted -

Reviewed by Kate Clifford (Reader)

Reviewed on August 4, 2003

Excellent deep write.