This is part of a poem... I am having problems with one stanza...your feedback is appreciated...My feeling is that the second stanza has too much in it...
First draft:
Deep within the valley
a glint of light revealed
a gentle flowing river
near a field of daffodils...
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It flows with sweetness and truth.
Peter
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