Darkness Descending... (poem) by Retta (Reindeer) Mckenzie on AuthorsDen

Reviewed by Renee Bagley (Reader)

Reviewed on January 16, 2004

Wow this is deeply affecting. You have a way with words.

Renee

Reviewed by ***** ********* (Reader)

Reviewed on December 18, 2003

Reindeer, this RULES!

"Wish I could bleed away this pain,
Making me feel so insane,
Where I keep hearing the whispered lies,
You told to me so many nights,
Laying in your arms,
Tracing your lips with my fingertips…

I trace them now,
With steel,
And the skin parts,
Looking so unreal… "

Absolutely superb!

Reviewed by ShyPoet 1

Reviewed on November 2, 2003

Powerful stuff here ...
Where I keep hearing the whispered lies,
You told to me so many nights,

Reviewed by Ronald Hull

Reviewed on October 26, 2003

Dark and deep, like the primal forest.

Reviewed by Tinka Boukes

Reviewed on October 26, 2003

Most excellent dark write Retta!!

Love Tinka

Reviewed by Chester Hardy lll

Reviewed on October 25, 2003

Excellent write Reindeer, I hope you have a clapper.

Reviewed by Marlene Dawn

Reviewed on October 25, 2003

Excellent Work!

Marlene

Reviewed by jude forese

Reviewed on October 25, 2003

powerful images that stimulate the mind and arouse the emotion...

Reviewed by Gwen Dickerson

Reviewed on October 25, 2003

Gee I can feel cold steel against the back of my neck. Great write, Reindeer!

Reviewed by Amor Sabor

Reviewed on October 25, 2003

This dark write cuts deep and close to the heart. Excellent work, Retta.
Amor

Reviewed by E T Waldron

Reviewed on October 25, 2003

Reindeer, the subtle way you wrote this makes it even more gripping and frightening. superb work , you are a real treat with a trick!;-)

Reviewed by B Thomas Daniels (Reader)

Reviewed on October 25, 2003

No more talking to Lily for you my dear Reindeer. lol
Great write love the way you ended it

Reviewed by Floria Kelderhouse (Reader)

Reviewed on October 25, 2003

Reindeer this is excellent writing...chilling and oh that ending...
"Hope you like the color red,
It’s the only the color I have,
Hey quit crying,
It’s better than being dead…"

I applaud you...floria

Reviewed by John Bidwell

Reviewed on October 25, 2003

Glad I read this in the light of day.
You are incredible.
I'm leaving a light on tonight.
John

Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader)

Reviewed on October 25, 2003

Your insight is growning and growing and growing. Well done!

Reviewed by La Belle Rouge (Reader)

Reviewed on October 25, 2003

It is chilling and compelling a rare dark jewel.

Reviewed by Trish - The Trickster

Reviewed on October 25, 2003

Chilling, but excellent write.

Reviewed by Al Swanson (Reader)

Reviewed on October 25, 2003

yes quite chilling, Al

Reviewed by Kate Clifford (Reader)

Reviewed on October 25, 2003

Excellent write!

Reviewed by Jenni Kalicharan

Reviewed on October 25, 2003

Wow!! Chilling to the bone!! Really good write.
Jenni

Reviewed by Kevin Mc Crum (Reader)

Reviewed on October 25, 2003

This is exquisite writing Reindeer!

Reviewed by Jill Eisnaugle

Reviewed on October 25, 2003

A light of beauty within a world and write of darkness. Exceptional!
Take care, Reindeer.
Jill :)

Reviewed by Lady Peg (Reader)

Reviewed on October 25, 2003

Rein,

Oh this one is so deep.
"Wish I could bleed away this pain,
Making me feel so insane,
Where I keep hearing the whispered lies,
You told to me so many nights,
Laying in your arms,
Tracing your lips with my fingertips…

I trace them now,
With steel,
And the skin parts,
Looking so unreal…"
excellent poem Hugs
Peg

Reviewed by Mr. Ed

Reviewed on October 25, 2003

Glad this is just a poem, but it's a very good one. Great picture, too.

Reviewed by Zenith Elliott

Reviewed on October 25, 2003

Retta, this is chilling. Very well written dark write...~Z~