I came to write a poem,
Because he asked me to,
You've been too quiet of late,
He whispers,
“What are you thinking?”
He reads only to see where I am,
He does not hear the words I speak,
Nor understand what I write,
He knows only that when I write,
I am trying to communicate,
What I see and feel,
But I have grown weary of words,
And do not wish to speak…
Nothing changes,
Life moves on despite the dead,
Who beg us to remember them;
Drifting in our dreams,
And haunting our memories,
With things we wish we had said.
I've been in darkness and the light
That shines overhead does not reach me,
The echoes of those who tell me to move on,
Are drowned out by the sorrow in my heart.
I came to write a poem for him,
Because he asked me to,
But he will not understand the words I write,
Nor remember the names,
That I hear whispering in my heart.
He will not understand that some hearts are slower
To forget and need more time to mend,
Before we speak of rainbows and unicorns,
And cities that lie buried beneath the sea.
He wants a poem from me,
And I came here to write one for him,
But the words he wants to hear,
Will not come to me…
I am sitting in a tree,
Watching the moon rise,
Watching the stars dance across the sky,
Listening to the wolves call out in loneliness,
And the last thing I want to do,
Is write a poem for him,
Instead I wrote one for me.
oh my...this is wonderful! In many respects, this is different in structure and voice and I have to agree with Amor below that this is one of your best, thus far.
It clearly is in a class all its own and if this is a portent of what we will be seeing from you my friend...keep it coming!
Healing presents in many guises, yours in this moment was penned! A powerful write, very touching. May the warmth of understanding embrace you as it envelops you with an abundance of love and light.
I think this to be one of your best writes yet, for it touches me on so many levels with such poetic beauty and grace. There is no doubt that you leave a toe in yesterday with memories that shall never disappear but with all else so much into today and tomorrow leaving such lines that touch so many others with your usual eloquence.
Amor
And a very nice poem it is! As always, you make me see you. Tree, moon, sky, wolves, and all!! As for the frustration the poem so
ably describes, I know the feeling well. Suspect every artist does.
We spend our lives trying to make ourselves clear. . .to people who
do not always care. Too many never do. Or are too tied to their
own concerns to read with their eyes and ears and hearts. Right?
Thank you for sharing your deeply sincere and always arresting
writings. 'Pea' <3
Totally gorgeous, Retta. What soul and honesty! And the most BEAUTIFUL poem, too! Funny, with so much to capture the mind and heart in your powerful descriptions and sentiments, it is a shame that your "he" is unable to fathom their depth of meaning. But you have given him what he asked for... the priceless jewel of your soul in writing. I can so identify with the pain of both being almost unread. Bless you and thank you, Kate xx
Truly poetic beauty abounds throughout this offering, Retta. Very moving and soul-reaching. Thank you for sharing this gift. Love and blessings to you,
An outstanding write my friend, very touching, deep, sad, uplifting, and unique....a powerful combination of emotions can be felt within the lines of this write. I could almost envision and hear the muse that was beckoning you...a wonderful write my friend....powerful indeed!
Blessings,
Joyce B.
Reindeer -
Mind if I hold you for a moment... in a warm hug of thanks for this creative summary of how we, who have lost, feel so much of the time? To have written such words is to have held onto love that can never be replaced.
On behalf of each and every one of us, Thank you... for giving us something strengthening to feel. During my second reading I knew smooth joy flowing within and over me. I am keeping these words in two special places.
- Bill
This is so soul baring and poignant it brought an ache to my heart as I felt a parallel connection in our thoughts. Sometimes all we can do is write to touch ourselves if we want to touch others in the future.
Fee
Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
Reviewed on June 27, 2007
I came to write a poem,
Because he asked me to,
You've been too quiet of late, <---we've all been thinking that.
Brillo poem, at a time when half my country is under water...
Reviewed by Elizabeth Taylor (Reader)
Reviewed on June 26, 2007
"...Nothing changes,
Life moves on despite the dead,
Who beg us to remember them;
Drifting in our dreams,
And haunting our memories,
With things we wish we had said..."
My favorite lines...a gem all the way through.
Elizabeth
Reviewed by Ron (sketchman) Axelson (Reader)
Reviewed on June 26, 2007
A very honest soul serching poem Rita.
I finally came to the conclusion in my life that
I can't change what I did not tell the
one's I love who are dead what I needed to tell them.
I do tell the living loved one's probably
too much of what they need to hear from me..
x0x0x0x
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a wonderful write, retta.
be well,
carolyn
Edwin
You are an exceptionally gifted poet - this is a deeply moving poem!
Best wishes,
Lance
The words are there, as always. You are blessed, in your vision and experience. Good to read you again, Retta. It has been a while.
I salute You, Poet.
In admiration,
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
Sandy
you have to do that!
Awesome art also!
Hugs
Dale
It clearly is in a class all its own and if this is a portent of what we will be seeing from you my friend...keep it coming!
Healing presents in many guises, yours in this moment was penned! A powerful write, very touching. May the warmth of understanding embrace you as it envelops you with an abundance of love and light.
Warm hugs
Elga
Amor
ably describes, I know the feeling well. Suspect every artist does.
We spend our lives trying to make ourselves clear. . .to people who
do not always care. Too many never do. Or are too tied to their
own concerns to read with their eyes and ears and hearts. Right?
Thank you for sharing your deeply sincere and always arresting
writings. 'Pea' <3
And obviously, you wrote one for us. Loved it. You capture so much emotion my friend. Bless You and Always write them for us.
ET
Love Tinka
Regis
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Tx., Karen Lynn. :D
Welcome back; you've been missed! :)
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
Welcome home, I've missed you.
Blessings,
Joyce B.
Bitter sweet sadness,thankyou,
stan nassano
Mind if I hold you for a moment... in a warm hug of thanks for this creative summary of how we, who have lost, feel so much of the time? To have written such words is to have held onto love that can never be replaced.
On behalf of each and every one of us, Thank you... for giving us something strengthening to feel. During my second reading I knew smooth joy flowing within and over me. I am keeping these words in two special places.
- Bill
Fee
Because he asked me to,
You've been too quiet of late, <---we've all been thinking that.
Brillo poem, at a time when half my country is under water...
Life moves on despite the dead,
Who beg us to remember them;
Drifting in our dreams,
And haunting our memories,
With things we wish we had said..."
My favorite lines...a gem all the way through.
Elizabeth
I finally came to the conclusion in my life that
I can't change what I did not tell the
one's I love who are dead what I needed to tell them.
I do tell the living loved one's probably
too much of what they need to hear from me..
x0x0x0x