I Watch You ~the rest of the story (poem) by Jack R Roberts on AuthorsDen

I Watch You ~the rest of the story
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I couldnt resist an attempt at La Belles challenge. I'm not even sure if this would be erotic, but its what I came up with. lol
You look at me and smile As I close and lock the door You loosen up your dress And let it fall onto the floor The only thing that matters In this world is me and you As we lay upon the bed To do the things that lovers do I hold your body close to mine In the glow of candle light We start searching for a feeling Hidden somewhere in the night Your every curve and feature Is being etched into my mind As the rhythm of your body Moves in harmony with mine The room is full of silence But it is now I realize That the words you are not saying Are there written in your eyes Your eyes tell me that deep within There is a burning fire And the flames are growing hotter Being fueled by pure desire You close your eyes and tremble And though you make no sound Its plain to see that feeling That we seek has now been found And as the two of us arrive Together at that place I kiss your lips and smile At the pleasure on your face And now I hold you close As together here we lay And listen to your heartbeat As you slowly fade away Dawns light shines through the window As I watch you while you sleep The curtains swaying in the breeze I hear you breathing deep You�re lying here in peaceful dream As I lie here awake The sheets upon you rise and fall With every breath you take I wonder what you�re dreaming As I watch you laying there Your pretty face so peaceful Framed within your shinny hair Are you dancing in the memory, Of the time we spent last night A time of only you and I In the absence of the light Tonight we will meet here again And love with all our might As again we seek that feeling Hidden somewhere in the night � Jack Roberts � November 8 2003

Reviewed by Kay P Devenish

Reviewed on November 10, 2003

It has to be counted as erotic because it made me feel hot all over.
Lucky lady she is!
Great poem Jack!

Reviewed by Karen Lynn Vidra, The Texas Tornado

Reviewed on November 9, 2003

a beautiful write, jack; you met labelle's challenge with a BANG! outstanding job! (((HUGS))) and much love, your texas friend, karen lynn. :D

Reviewed by Trixie Love

Whoaaaa...
Jack, This is such a
beautiul sensual write...

Excellent job!!!

Trixie :)

Reviewed by Sandie May Joyce (Sandie Angel)

Hi Jack:

Superb write! Great rhymes and flows very well with the sensuality of the poem. Wow!

May Lu a.k.a. Sandie Angel :o)

Reviewed by Tinka Boukes

This is such a passionate write Jack!!

Love Tinka

Reviewed by Lisa Hilbers

Jack,,This was beautifully done! The rythym the flow was outstanding. The passion was exciting and brilliant. I'd say the challenge was well met! Lisa

Reviewed by La Belle Rouge (Reader)

Jack this is exquisite, not only sensual but so very romantic, capturing an aura of real love. Wonderful response to the challenge.

Reviewed by Bhuwan Thapaliya

Reviewed on November 8, 2003

Jack.....such a passionate write....loved this much!!!!

Reviewed by Linda Hill

BEAUTIFUL, my friend..
Soft and romantic
I loved this...I read
it twice...

* Linda *

Reviewed by E T Waldron

This is a superb sensual write Jack, and you lost none of your meter and rhyme!

Reviewed by William Bonilla

very well donw for a challenge
an excellent write

William

Reviewed by A PAX