Do you see me?
I said DO YOU SEE ME?
You say such pretty things.
But the words flown like phoenix
from your mouth,
turn to dust before they reach the sun.
You can't even bring truth to your voice,
and your eyes hollows empty.
You can't bring yourself to look at me
with desire.
All that was is lost
and I beg and plead and cry.
But my words are torn to pieces,
before they reach that impenetrable shield.
They are thrown back like missiles
in stealth. But I can still see.
All is lost
as I beg, plead and cry.
I have lost my appeal.
Once supple, desirable, beautiful,
now empty, grey and dull.
All is lost
as I crawl, bow and cry.
as I beg, plead and die.
and it's also very moving and demanding
on the emotions..but if this is personal
shake yourself into strength and self-assertion,
it's the only way.
the writing is fine indeed.
Strength to you!
john
asa
It's a beautiful poem, crying out for help, and we heard. But we can do nothing but encourage you and it is only you that can start writing beautiful poetry about something you love to write about.
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I agree with Jerry. Stomp and yell,,then leave him behind for someone who will treat you better.
Budd