Paul,
This poem makes me think of those unforgetable memories that haunt us. The ones we think upon, wondering "what if" or wishing we could go back to make a different choice. Many of my childhood memories haunt me - unhappy memories that I hope to find peace with one day. This poem seems to have that same mixture of emotions - haunting and craving peace. Great rhythm, as always! Love and Hugs,
Sheila
Reviewed by S J (Reader)
Reviewed on January 20, 2007
Beautiful lines throughout. This is simply stunning, Paul!
Your words brought tears to my eyes.
Lovely, lovely work!
Wow, this is spectacular! I loved every word of it...and yes, you do the rythym and rhyme perfectly. I'm like you, no formal training, I just write what comes out, but I love the rhyme with proper rythym and boy do you have it!
Thanks,
Melissa
Reviewed by Debra Harmes-Kurth (Reader)
Reviewed on January 19, 2007
The flow and rhyme in this piece work together great. Let me say first I enjoyed reading this. I know it was not intended as amusing but it was. I found myself chuckling a few times (the second and third stanza), not becasue it was funny, but because I understand where you were writing this. I believe it is though persistent and sometimes haunting thoughts that allow our pens flight.
debra
Paul, this is so good -- your imagery and gentle flow join its perfect rhyme and meter to fill your readers with awe and inspiration. An excellent poem.
Love,
CJ
This is POWERFUL Paul!
Wow!For someone not trained *( I read your Bio)
You amaze me with your writing style!
YOu stark said it all in a nutshell!
Tears to me are a cleansing of our Soul1
This is said perfectly!
WArmest HuGs, Sheee
Well, the self-proclaimed untrained has penned a marvelous piece in rhythm and rhyme...and you didn't miss a beat, Paul. I think I know this place you write about ...mind bombarded by the "haunts" exhausting your mind with their sounds and visions. The title "Cacophoney" is perfect and just happens, as a lover of words, to be one of my favorites ...and I think the tears are part of the journey. Much enjoyed, Paul.
xo Taylor
Amen!
The shrill of sounds that haunt this life, it is there, within peace of it all, this too shall all make sense!
"...Maybe once in peace of thought
When past has taken all it ought
Living will be as it's sought
Paid with every tear I wrought"
Loved this write!
Love and Peace~
Kimmy~
You have painted with your excellent chosen
Words a beautiful picture of the yearnings
Of the heart and soul capturing
One's own thoughts and feelings!!
Superb!imagery and powerful read
Love And Peace To You...Morning Star
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This poem makes me think of those unforgetable memories that haunt us. The ones we think upon, wondering "what if" or wishing we could go back to make a different choice. Many of my childhood memories haunt me - unhappy memories that I hope to find peace with one day. This poem seems to have that same mixture of emotions - haunting and craving peace. Great rhythm, as always! Love and Hugs,
Sheila
Your words brought tears to my eyes.
Lovely, lovely work!
Thank you
Love, Sheila
Thanks,
Melissa
debra
Love,
CJ
Agape,
Jo
Regis
Wow!For someone not trained *( I read your Bio)
You amaze me with your writing style!
YOu stark said it all in a nutshell!
Tears to me are a cleansing of our Soul1
This is said perfectly!
WArmest HuGs, Sheee
xo Taylor
The shrill of sounds that haunt this life, it is there, within peace of it all, this too shall all make sense!
"...Maybe once in peace of thought
When past has taken all it ought
Living will be as it's sought
Paid with every tear I wrought"
Loved this write!
Love and Peace~
Kimmy~
you have some excellent lines in here
mental illness that's what this provokes
enjoyed this!!!
Words a beautiful picture of the yearnings
Of the heart and soul capturing
One's own thoughts and feelings!!
Superb!imagery and powerful read
Love And Peace To You...Morning Star
Faces which I've never seen
Wander out and in between
I love these two lines which we all experience.
Happy New Year Paul!!!!!
Love from your poet friend,
Sandie May Angel :o)
Happy New Year Paul!!
love Tinka