I'm here...Can't you hear me?
Why don't you answer me ?
My eyes are closed but I know you're there.
I sense your presence. Don't do this to me.
Say something, anything. Have they sown
my lids shut? They're too heavy to move.
The pain of not seeing you is greater
than the physical pain.
This is not funny, it's unbearable.
Stop sobbing. Tell me what's wrong.
Why are you acting this way?
You're smothering me. Hey !
Finally, your holding my hand.
Was that too much to ask?
You're trembling...What's wrong?
I must have hurt you in some way...
Is that it? Answer me.
Don't let go. Don't leave. I'm sorry.
I can take the darkness as long as
there is you. Are you here? My body's
gone with the pain. I'm not alone.
It's not you. Who is it ? Answer me.
Wow, Paul! This one captivated me. I'd love to know what inspired this. Different for you, yet it holds your talent for drawing emotion and compassion from the reader. Eerie imagery. I can't help but imagine myself in this position. Bravo! Love and Hugs.
Sheila
Reviewed by Jim McClellan (Reader)
Reviewed on May 31, 2003
this is like the prelude to a dark dream. I am left only to imagine. I think I felt a chill while reading it. Excellent!
Mac =)
Reviewed by Tony Nerone (Reader)
Reviewed on May 13, 2003
This was fabulous, Paul.
You just changed my writing style.I really liked it.
Paul,
This is sad, and yes haunting. I watched a very dear person to me in a coma, and there was nothing I could do, but talk to her and pray that she heard me.
There is a lot of pain here.
Very dramatic write. It seems to be about someone who is in a coma or dying, unable to understand why their loved one by the bed can't hear their thoughts. Is the other person an angel at the end? ......Sara
A stunning poem, Paul.Very gripping and intense.
Chrissie
Reviewed by Lady Peg (Reader)
Reviewed on May 13, 2003
Goodmorning Paul,
whow this one set me back it is haunting and the expressions so excellent.
"Don't let go. Don't leave. I'm sorry.
I can take the darkness as long as
there is you. Are you here? My body's
gone with the pain. I'm not alone.
It's not you. Who is it ? Answer me. "
Thankyou was caught up into this one.
Peggy
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Sheila
Mac =)
You just changed my writing style.I really liked it.
tony
Wow, what an intense
write...
Very powerful...
Trixie :)
This is sad, and yes haunting. I watched a very dear person to me in a coma, and there was nothing I could do, but talk to her and pray that she heard me.
There is a lot of pain here.
Hugs,
Maria
Reindeer
wow times a trillion
Bravo!
Thanking you
Teresa
Chrissie
whow this one set me back it is haunting and the expressions so excellent.
"Don't let go. Don't leave. I'm sorry.
I can take the darkness as long as
there is you. Are you here? My body's
gone with the pain. I'm not alone.
It's not you. Who is it ? Answer me. "
Thankyou was caught up into this one.
Peggy
Wow Paul this is so haunting and riviting
Wow! Excellent. Great poem! Bill
Intense...I've read it three
times...
~~Linda~~
"I can take the darkness as long as there is you."
Very good words indeed!
Sandie Angel :o) a.k.a. May Lu $*_*$