I see where your coming from here John and how you could relate to my poem. The thing with fog, it's always thicker the futher away it is because in it you still have clarity of vision.
Dear John,
Great poem! I liked it all very much but I tripped over the last line. I think it would be better if you removed the 'to' in it or changed the line to 'this road too, is a fog-shrouded pier' Just a suggestion. Please don't be offended. I hope to read more of your work as I have time. Thanks for this.
Chanti
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Nicely done john!!
Paul;-)
Great poem! I liked it all very much but I tripped over the last line. I think it would be better if you removed the 'to' in it or changed the line to 'this road too, is a fog-shrouded pier' Just a suggestion. Please don't be offended. I hope to read more of your work as I have time. Thanks for this.
Chanti