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At times, I wish to write,
A poem,
To describe a scene,
Or, a feeling within.
I can't think of words,
To say,
Words, that would rhyme at least,
A few lines.
I need, to cross that barrier,
Into your mind,
To reach, your thoughts,
Hoping, you understand mine.
To describe, A rose, her perfume,
The morning drops, of dew,
To implant, those images, in your mind,
Is all, I wish to do.
Deep, into your mind,
As my poetry, you read,
I hope, you'll never forget them,
In due time.
By: William Bonilla.......6/18/02
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tinka
I agree with Erin, you have captured it!
Hugs,
Maria
Too many commas though. Poetry has less punctuation than prose, only enough to give the reader a clue as to where to pause. [I'm assuming from your poem that you are asking...???]
Space the last two lines differently, and you've got it.
"I hope you'll never forget them,
In due time. "
Kindest regards,
~E
~E