The nights are long and you search the streets
Never the equal of you to meet
A little is here and a little is there
Not quite enough to completely compare
The ego of one with the Id of another
A desire to suck in, entrap and to smother
For dreams that escape with a victim suspect
In a space of lost time where senses detect
A smile that's inviting, a sameness of heart
A face with my spirit, a shadow and sparks
Eyes that hold images locking with same
Passing in darkness he whispers my name
Scars with soft tissues embedded in souls
A heart reaching out to break your mold
Faces are masked and asking to dance
With a night showing promise
Passions with chance
As long as I'm walking
Each step on a stone
Streets full of people
In pairs or alone
Showing their love or blending in grays
When the sun hits the shadows
Then I've seen better days
Challenge is an issue for each fated step
Becomes progress in finding the Id with my depth
For lust is one thing that passion can't hide
And if wishes were horses more fools would ride.
A wonderful array of images and interesting juxtapositions that manages to tell a touching story without dropping into standard narrative... this is great work!
Well done, Susan. Some startlingly beautiful lines here and the whole poem is exceptional expression. Great write.
Best regards,
Leland
Reviewed by Nicole Davis Vergara (Reader)
Reviewed on September 4, 2003
Ahhhh such a excellant write Susan, and that last line just cinches it all! KUDOS!
~Nikki~
Reviewed by Calendula Petal (Reader)
Reviewed on September 4, 2003
what a refreshing write, I loved it.....you know I always say there is being in love and there is being in lust...I think the lust always comes first ....
(Richard M. Feldman) Ever since I was a young boy, the only thing I wanted to be was a cowboy. I wanted to own and work on a real ranch, with cattle and horses. Especially horses.
While I never became a cowboy, considering everything I have done
Best regards,
Leland
~Nikki~
Reindeer
Streets full of people
In pairs or alone
Showing their love or blending in grays
When the sun hits the shadows
Then I've seen better days
Love Tinka
Amor