Why are you doing this;
do you need me to quicken you?
Lay an offering on the throne of my desire
and write only as if life depended upon it
and I shall sustain you through troubled times
.
I shall write of our lives tragic play,
singing the words you spoke to me
in earnest desperation, wearing your soddy velvet
and a bittersweet smile that smelled of chocolate;
I will be the insubstantial everything you crave
.
It must be said, however, that I will not weep
for every little death you subject yourself to
for I know you are weak as clinging vines
and I shall not have it infectious to me
nor be responsive to your terrible incidences of life
.
She has already decided
that no answers will be given
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Reviews of "Obscure relationship dialogue"
Reviewed by C.S. Snow (Reader)
Reviewed on November 6, 2003
This kind of thing works both ways, and sometimes can be said by both
partners in any relationship. And, you've put it very well.
I particularly like "I will be the insubstantial everything you crave
It must be said, however, that I will not weep
for every little death you subject yourself to"
This is the rarest look inside the mind of the artist, and it works well.
-C.S.
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partners in any relationship. And, you've put it very well.
I particularly like "I will be the insubstantial everything you crave
It must be said, however, that I will not weep
for every little death you subject yourself to"
This is the rarest look inside the mind of the artist, and it works well.
-C.S.
that no answers will be given"
Well done!
Tami
These verses really hit home!
and I shall sustain you through troubled times
What is that folksong from the 60's that I just can't quite recall, the title of which is SO similar to this verse?
I adore your poetry.
Richard Vallance
And those last 2 lines are the most telling.