I like "A" best, but I like the last two lines of "B" better- the "we cannot do" seems better than the "we shall do" because it makes more sense with the start of the sentence it is in. Whichever you do, it is a good poem, and boy, can i ever relate, lol.
My pal, parallelism-- two line lovers connected periodically with perpendicular spacers-- move steamy dreams like locomotives-- when separated, the dream trains derail.
Love makes us all vulnerable to being hurt and feeling emotional pain. The power of love will often play mind games--let your heart guide you to the right decision.
You offer choices and you offer them well but what do we really settle for in the end? I like how you approached and handled this, it's more than clever, Sara, it's penetrating.
John
First Edition Translation of Teselas by Carmen Crespo X111 César Simón Poetry Prixe 2016 Translated from Spanish by Robin Ouzman Hislop and Amparo Arrospíde
This book represents a thirty-day period of my poetry journal. Each poem addresses
the dominant thoughts occupying my mind during the early morning hours of a given
day.
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Cryssa
Here's to hoping yours never do.
--Charlie
s
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
Fee
"a" is for pessimists.
Noting ventured,
nothing .......
Love begins by meeting half way.
You write, right well.
-Bill
Love makes us all vulnerable to being hurt and feeling emotional pain. The power of love will often play mind games--let your heart guide you to the right decision.
Happiness and sunshine, Stuart
John
Regis
A heartfelt poem about someone seemingly afraid of getting hurt.
Mary
:)