Driving through this cloud on the ground
some call it fog, it is cold death. Here on Tallamena a shroud
just one wrong move, you plunge the depth. Told her i was here, she'll worry
and this arete highway steepens. Ten pointer jumps in a flurry
a jerk of the wheel, pulse quickens.
Swerved wrong, over the precipice
a thousand feet down crashing through. Bouncing off boulders and tall spruce
flipped over once nothing i can do. Body flaying over and back
only thought i have is how she'll be hurt. Screams in my brain all going black
windows broken i'm covered in dirt.
Snapping limbs as i tumble down
rocks smashing metal, tossed about. End over end, side to side, all blown
i love you, i love you, i shout In a cold sweat, i sit upright
looking around i see her there. Asleep but saying "You alright"
then i kiss her,"baby i'm here".
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Reviews of "Over the Precipice"
Reviewed by John Dyhouse (Reader)
Reviewed on April 9, 2014
A chilling description of a frightening event, love the twist
Nice. A realistic bit of wordsmithing, bringing the drama full circle with the awakening. Kudos.
Reviewed by Diana Legun (Reader)
Reviewed on March 24, 2014
You certainly carried through the action well here, Budd. Choosing to 'bold' cap every other line was also a plus. A vivid vision adeptly expressed. ~~ Diana
As I started reading I saw your dream appear.On the lighter side, good job on your part, her waking up to give you a kiss and tell you everything is alright, All ends well for you this day my friend
Definitely held my attention from beginning to end. You captured the confusion and panic very well, but I was so happy it was a dream and not a memory.
The songs and art in this book are about our collective emergence after the pandemic and trauma of the last few years - comprised of 5 collections: World as Refuge, Where We Live, In Our Hands, Rhythms of Change and What We See & Sow.
A further collection of poems, many from years in the Middle East, but also the California San Francisco and Central Coast areas (Santa Cruz, Carmel, Big Sur, Berkeley, etc.).
Diana...
Shivers through this one ~ Awakening the dream to see her there.
Excellent write.
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