Alone (poem) by LaRedeaux on AuthorsDen

Alone
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Rated "G" by the Author.

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Feeling all alone desparate cries from the soul.

It seems as I've been here before on the edge of sanity back and forth I rock teetering on the illusions displayed before me clear as the day peering into the dead of night keeping a steady pace yet still trailing behind the race of life my loaded Knapp sack is heavy bearing the facets of beggar life? all signs lead me astray hinting to end life or stay you can't see me just a shell of what I used to be behind shimmering eyes hidden darkness of innocence long gone shattered dreams pierced the night of screams now here I stand carrying the load unbefitting of any man whispers drawing near again outraging at unresolved hurt cries and pleas for relief unforgotten traumatic scenes prance into view unrelenting interrupting the minstrel show replaying schemes fast forward pause rewind go slow erase my mind weeps the innocence inside searching the corners under small rocks to hide back and forth again I teeter still invisible to your naked eye your gaze lingers past me how can you not see the real me you carried inside your womb yet only now you see my tomb just a shell of what I used to be emotions bleeding havoc inside my brain mentally grinding me insane please save this shell of me reignite my light its fading drifting surely if you look deeper and see the long lost imminence and save me

Reviewed by Budd Nelson

Reviewed on August 19, 2012

Your words draw the reader into this raw piece of excellent writing giving us all pause to reflect on the emotions that stirred this into being
budd

Reviewed by Linda Hill

LaRedeaux,
Wow! This is outstanding writing. Emotions are raw in this amazing write. I will be tracking you!

Many blessings,
+Linda

Reviewed by Ronald Hull

Some very fine writing eliciting emotions of someone who feels utterly lost and alone. Such a pleasure to read.

Ron