Dear Jeff,
Rather than get into a technical debate about what a pentrachan sonnet should or should not be (there is always plenty of debate from purists) let me share with you how I felt about your poem from my heart. You are a talented poet and you ALWAYS seem to write with such ease. You are skilful and adept at using words to create vivid imagery. In this sonnet I was deeply touched and the last lines have had their impact.
Well done!
Love Chanti
Debs, I must have read it wrong. I was told by the master himself (Ben-YEHU) that Petrarchan sonnet can be either ABBA ABBA or ABAB ABAB. Thanks for your comments. I will research further. And as I said, it can definitely be improved - my version was the thirty-minute version; so I should defnitely spend more time refining. -- Jeff
Reviewed by Gabrielle C (Reader)
Reviewed on January 23, 2005
This is beautiful and very moving. Thanks for sharing!
As far as I can see, you have met the pattern for Petrarchan sonnet. The rhyme scheme is on target. You have a problem introduced in the beginninga and solved by the end. As for your content, I find it very beautiful. Someone who had never tasted of true, undying love and companionship because of personal flaws finds a lover who will take him as he is and give him that much more. Nicely done.
Sounds very nice to me, but I don't know how strictly you have to stick to the pattern to qualify the style (that's why I bill all of mine as countrymusicwannabes). I looked it up, so I might learn something. Here's the pattern if there's anyone else like me out there ;-)
Petrarchan Sonnet
An Italian sonnet form perfected by (Petrarch)? (Francesco Petrarca) (1304-1374), characterized by an octave with a RhymeScheme of abbaabba and a sestet rhyming variously, but usually cdecde or cdccdc. The octave typically introduces the theme or problem, with the sestet providing the resolution.
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and you became the key to more than life
..poignant line..
superb work...
Vesna .)
Monette
Rather than get into a technical debate about what a pentrachan sonnet should or should not be (there is always plenty of debate from purists) let me share with you how I felt about your poem from my heart. You are a talented poet and you ALWAYS seem to write with such ease. You are skilful and adept at using words to create vivid imagery. In this sonnet I was deeply touched and the last lines have had their impact.
Well done!
Love Chanti
this is outstanding
i loved your choice of words
and thanks for sharing the knowledge
:)
this piece. Bravo!
Love Tinka
Petrarchan Sonnet
An Italian sonnet form perfected by (Petrarch)? (Francesco Petrarca) (1304-1374), characterized by an octave with a RhymeScheme of abbaabba and a sestet rhyming variously, but usually cdecde or cdccdc. The octave typically introduces the theme or problem, with the sestet providing the resolution.