For the past several days, I have been captivated in your verse, my thoughts returning again and again to drink from the cup of your passionate pleas. If I finish reading it all before I am full of you, I feel certain, I shall want to read them again.
This is very powerful, overwhelming even! Whoever forced him to come off his break - thank you. I see everyone else chose favorite lines... here's mine -Silence speaks volumes -. Thanks for writing.
Reviewed by Vesna Perkovic (Reader)
Reviewed on December 28, 2003
rescue me from this
purgatory
let me breathe your breath
as mine
and wipe away your salty tears
hold fast to me and don't let go
don't stop this flood!
drown me in you!
..I must admit I was rather startled by this poem..then it began to sink in..WOW!!! Jeff!!! I didn't know you could /would write like this..hmmm..what happened??!! Oh...I see..you've also been bitten by your Twin (Twin Flame)...LOL...well it's about time...
This is incredible...you have just expressed, with sooo much passion that which one calls the Twin Flame connection..is it any wonder ALL want to experience this ecstasy!!
By Jove..this write is superb..IT also goes into my library...I will savour it later...do write some more akin to this one ..pleeeeease...thanks!!!
Ok..so NOW I'm an ardent fan..:)..yup..I'm hooked!!!
Vesna....
Reviewed by T. Emilie Dybevik (Reader)
Reviewed on December 27, 2003
LaBelle could make my grandma write like this --- LOL---nobody raises the bar higher for this type of poetry. You know something.... THIS is damned sexy and done with exquisite class. I appreciate that.
Fine fine work Jeff.
Thank YOU,
Emilie
Reviewed by Al Swanson (Reader)
Reviewed on December 23, 2003
Hi Jeff
Well bro, I can definately understand how you saw virtue in m stuff, hehe smile, poignant, demanding, and invading, to say a few descriptive words here, I appreciated your honesty in this raping root causes for feelings invested and had, it was a very good display of the "hidings" we go thru as individuals, and certain "things" we stand behind in hiding, that either now longer exist, or were never really there to begin with, phantom living, smile, you brought yourself out well, and also, what you thought additionally existed in the "other". Personally, I feel the blood adjective is becoming a little overused, and there simply must be better ways to describe it. In time to come people may get lost by the use of blood too much, although I am well aware it means life, cordially, a l
Very intense and searing, Jeff! Different for you! An excitable, snarling write exquisitely expressed and beautifully composed!
Reviewed by Sheila Jones (Reader)
Reviewed on December 18, 2003
This is an extraordinary write Jeff, so beautifully said.
"knock down these walls
take what you find
spoils and plunder
yours for the keep
take my life and heartbeat which I no longer own
they are yours for a whisper in my ear
of dulcet songs written by our meld"
I read this after reading La Belle's. Both of you are amazing poets. This was great. The words you chose to use were so beautiful & descriptive. I am in awe.
Jeff, this is an incredibly well written poem: full of the emotions we should have for another who cannot express their own. That is love in deed. ~~Bonnie Q
Reviewed by Kate Clifford (Reader)
Reviewed on December 16, 2003
Thank your friends for me! This is a great write that I would not have wanted to miss. The power of emotion in this is fantastic.
awesome write! still do not hesitate on using a life jacket ...
Reviewed by *********** ********** (Reader)
Reviewed on December 16, 2003
Stunning work Jeff...I guess the muse bit hard. ;)
This is dynamic...intense and memorable writing..long after the words are read they can still be tasted....ty, Dani
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Peter
rescue me from this
purgatory
let me breathe your breath
as mine
and wipe away your salty tears
hold fast to me and don't let go
don't stop this flood!
drown me in you!
Gina
purgatory
let me breathe your breath
as mine
and wipe away your salty tears
hold fast to me and don't let go
don't stop this flood!
drown me in you!
..I must admit I was rather startled by this poem..then it began to sink in..WOW!!! Jeff!!! I didn't know you could /would write like this..hmmm..what happened??!! Oh...I see..you've also been bitten by your Twin (Twin Flame)...LOL...well it's about time...
This is incredible...you have just expressed, with sooo much passion that which one calls the Twin Flame connection..is it any wonder ALL want to experience this ecstasy!!
By Jove..this write is superb..IT also goes into my library...I will savour it later...do write some more akin to this one ..pleeeeease...thanks!!!
Ok..so NOW I'm an ardent fan..:)..yup..I'm hooked!!!
Vesna....
Fine fine work Jeff.
Thank YOU,
Emilie
Well bro, I can definately understand how you saw virtue in m stuff, hehe smile, poignant, demanding, and invading, to say a few descriptive words here, I appreciated your honesty in this raping root causes for feelings invested and had, it was a very good display of the "hidings" we go thru as individuals, and certain "things" we stand behind in hiding, that either now longer exist, or were never really there to begin with, phantom living, smile, you brought yourself out well, and also, what you thought additionally existed in the "other". Personally, I feel the blood adjective is becoming a little overused, and there simply must be better ways to describe it. In time to come people may get lost by the use of blood too much, although I am well aware it means life, cordially, a l
Reindeer
"knock down these walls
take what you find
spoils and plunder
yours for the keep
take my life and heartbeat which I no longer own
they are yours for a whisper in my ear
of dulcet songs written by our meld"
Exquisite poetry!
Sheila
let me breathe your breath as mine
and wipe away your salty tears
hold fast to me and don't let go
don't stop this flood!
drown me in you!"
Fantastic work Jeff
peace
Love Tinka
Striking reading it offers.
Thank You.
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU –
FOR A COUNTRY OF LOVE AND TOGETHERNESS
IN AN EMPIRE UNDER THE SWORD OF JUSTICE.
This is dynamic...intense and memorable writing..long after the words are read they can still be tasted....ty, Dani