You hit me so hard
I hunched over
Falling down to my knees
Gasping for air
As I tried to get up
I felt another blow
The pain more intense
Then the first
The weakness of my body falling
My inner self dying
No strength left to lift my soul
I crawl to a corner
Hoping for my recovery
As the tears stream down my face
Consumed by my thoughts
With the desires to get up
Knowing if I rise again
It will be to face another battle
Which I don’t have the strength for
I could not withstand another hit
Was it something I did to deserve this?
Will you ever stop?
As I sit on this cold floor
Holding my legs close to my chest
My head bent over on my knees
I know this battle is no where near the end
Such pain and anguish so well expressed, Linda. I am sorry that I "discovered" you a bit late so I will just wish you a belated welcome to the Den. Take care. I wish you love, peace, and strength. Regis
another strong write...vivid anger and pain.
I do hope this is not the situation you are in. If it is, lady poet, you need to get out, get help, anything but stay in that.
Linda,
Again, welcome to the den.
This is a strong and powerful poem that many of us can say- been there done that- which is really a sad thing.
The part where you asked, is there something I did to deserve this? NO, it wasn't you, it was some idiot who doesn't respect himself or life. The main part of your healing is to realize it wasn't your fault. Keep letting it all out with your writing and the healing will come.
May God bless you and give you the strength and faith to move forward to the better life you deserve.
Blessings,
Judith
Reviewed by Floria Kelderhouse (Reader)
Reviewed on February 5, 2004
Welcome to the Den Linda...I am an admirer of Roberts poetry and he told us about you....this poem is so powerful ..it angered me that women have to go through this...you really expressed it well here..strong and powerful write....floria
Welcome to the Den! Writing is freeing. I'm glad you have Robert as a friend.
Reviewed by La Belle Rouge (Reader)
Reviewed on February 5, 2004
Welcome to AD Linda, this is so intense and all too real.
Reviewed by Katy Walsvik (Reader)
Reviewed on February 5, 2004
Hi and welcome, Linda.. you've written in vivid images with a nearly manic, descending, cascading experience for the reader.. reality is crystal here in your piece. You demonstrate that writing can be therapeutic, yet heart wrenching... I do hope this is commentary, not self-descriptive. This den can be a wonderful source of support and friendship.. and your talent guarantees a wide readership. Keep writing! katy xox.
Hello Linda -- welcome to the den. Obviously you've taken step #1 -- that's a foot out the door. Now you keep on writing out. Thanks for sharing your work with us.
This is dynamic and emotional
It's good that you can write it out. You've done a great job.
Marilyn
Reviewed by Ron (sketchman) Axelson (Reader)
Reviewed on February 4, 2004
Not one person deserves this, the hits of abuse.
A lot of pain in this one. Written well.
Welcome to the den. You have a great friend in Robert. He is
admired by many here at the den.
Welcome Linda...You come highly recommended;-) thank you for sharing your poetry with us, this piece is so deeply felt it is gut wrenching,I detest abuse of any kind...a superb poem!
Reviewed by Kate Clifford (Reader)
Reviewed on February 4, 2004
Welcome to the den! Very powerful write. The emotional battle is a difficult one, that you have capture extremely well in this write.
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I do hope this is not the situation you are in. If it is, lady poet, you need to get out, get help, anything but stay in that.
painful write--emotive and strongly penned--well done
no one deserves this--get out, if you are in this situation--it will only get worse--i know, i've been there
(((((HUGS))))) and love, karla. :(
Again, welcome to the den.
This is a strong and powerful poem that many of us can say- been there done that- which is really a sad thing.
The part where you asked, is there something I did to deserve this? NO, it wasn't you, it was some idiot who doesn't respect himself or life. The main part of your healing is to realize it wasn't your fault. Keep letting it all out with your writing and the healing will come.
May God bless you and give you the strength and faith to move forward to the better life you deserve.
Blessings,
Judith
Carmen
This is dynamic and emotional
It's good that you can write it out. You've done a great job.
Marilyn
A lot of pain in this one. Written well.
Welcome to the den. You have a great friend in Robert. He is
admired by many here at the den.
Gary