like father, like sons

Brian,

This is a very beautiful tribute to oe that allows you to express in such a wonderful poem. You capture her essence and breath in the joy.

Jos

Beautiful offering!!

Love Tinka

I enjoyed your change of pace Brian! She surely sounds like someone to write about.;-) WEll done!

Eileen

I got excited at first simply for the fact that you utilised a short line format with line breaks, which I personally use and have a great respect for others who do it for the level of talent it takes to do it correctly. While I was first excited, I got bored with the poem. I felt like the repetitive nature of the stanza's because redundant rather than create a pattern as a form of expressing importance. I think the only reason I got that from this was because I felt the stanza's were too short, there for your repeating line didn't need to be repeated that often. Aside from that little issue I did like the content of your stanza's, it was just overall because of the brevity of the piece things like subtle diction problems and redundancy really stood out. Sorry man, just didn't entirely like this.