Gianetta Ellis posted a poem also using 3 word lines and 4 line stanzas. I asked if I could post her poem with mine and she agreed. The two poems together tell more than either one, to my mind. What do you think?
to look is not the same as to see
natural
by Henry Burt Stevens
January 2008
laying down my
Mother's well worn
Bible i walk
out in the night
clear air reveals
bright sky with
its way far wonders
of the starry sight
Galileo the ancient
sailor suffered for
his discovery of
earth not center
NASA reveals in
outrageous color
the many wonders
far beyond us
me am but a flea
on a trick pony
tethered in a ring
going round round
using science
the real story
may one day
be ours to tell.
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Gianetta Ellis recently wrote a poem that uses mostly 3 word lines and 4 line stanzas. I found this interesting and asked her permission to post her poem on my page, mine on her page.
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Her introduction to her poem
Unrestrained by the "realistic" and "practical" perceptions that all too often bind people to a current point in life - like prisoner's ropes tethering to a fixed point affording limited venues and, therefore, limited inspiration.
(Note: "present" is used below as a verb, e.g., "opportunities present themselves.")
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Reviewed by lizzie gott (Reader)
Reviewed on May 26, 2008
I think your poem, "Natural" is wonderfully written
and clicks evenly as a song.
Using Calgary as a backdrop the author satirizes the self-serving nature of the public as it continues to fatten itself, not only physically, but egotistically as well.
This collection of poetry addresses the nature of time, reflections on the natural world, the difficulty of loss,
contemporary social issues and gratitude for life.
and clicks evenly as a song.
Just randomly coming by.