I see the flames draw near The way they are fed from the arrowhead Defying the wind burning towards the target slow motion approaching its destination with indifference ready to rip, tear and splinter muscle on bone I stand ready with heart exposed
No! try it again but this time from the depths the lines are written with dimension, passion and you deliver cardboard Your end is near let me feel it Improvise if you must
I am but an object A shell protecting not the seed, but the void Pull your bow and let my fate fly Scorch me in its angry flame until the smell of my burning flesh becomes my only sense before the blackness
Ok I see you understand the premise But where is The anticipation, The fear words are music there are tones to each like quarter or whole notes I am looking for an orchestra you give me scales
I see the glint in the archers eye Squinting to better aim destruction The bull’s-eye painted on my existence
No, No! You are about to die Don’t you have any feelings about that?
No
Well then how about a past love Is that something you can draw on?
A heart beats from memories pulse The taste of life seduced in moral sin succulent tangibles entwined in intimacy bodies exploring divinity under Hades’ eyes Held captive in the thought of a caress when life was living in a gaze never caring beyond the moment
It is not cupids arrow, that approaches It is the decimation the final construct of my demise Tears stream hoping to douse fire’s course before the penetration of sanctuary and what was turns to ash
Great Poem! There are many lines in this that are worthy of quoting, but I think that this stanza speaks volumes:
"I see the glint in the archers eye
Squinting to better aim destruction
The bull’s-eye painted on my existence"
That is Perfection!
In the century of poetic revelation,
"Directors Cut" speaks for its lines and delivers its voice
to be recorded in the - studios of the millennia - while its
messages like fresh ambrosias please the taste of the
mind and nourish the soul.
" ... A heart beats from memories pulse
The taste of life seduced in moral sin
succulent tangibles entwined in intimacy
bodies exploring divinity under Hades’ eyes
Held captive in the thought of a caress
when life was living in a gaze
never caring beyond the moment
It is not cupids arrow, that approaches
It is the decimation
the final construct of my demise ..."
I've done this, felt this. No good can come of it! Love the cardboard line -- ouch! My bringer of cardboard has ice blue eyes that match his heart; I wish him death. {wink}
P.S. Got your message. Forgive my procrastination -- time is not on my side.
Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader)
Reviewed on June 16, 2005
Gotta love it and I did! Someone else has a sense of humor and a tendency for talking to himself, eh? This was exceptional.
"A shell protecting
not the seed, but the void"
This is such a unique format to use for your message ... drew me in and carried me through to the finale. Well done!
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"I see the glint in the archers eye
Squinting to better aim destruction
The bull’s-eye painted on my existence"
That is Perfection!
Love Tinka
In the century of poetic revelation,
"Directors Cut" speaks for its lines and delivers its voice
to be recorded in the - studios of the millennia - while its
messages like fresh ambrosias please the taste of the
mind and nourish the soul.
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
Excellent Eye Opener...
TRASK
" ... A heart beats from memories pulse
The taste of life seduced in moral sin
succulent tangibles entwined in intimacy
bodies exploring divinity under Hades’ eyes
Held captive in the thought of a caress
when life was living in a gaze
never caring beyond the moment
It is not cupids arrow, that approaches
It is the decimation
the final construct of my demise ..."
I've done this, felt this. No good can come of it! Love the cardboard line -- ouch! My bringer of cardboard has ice blue eyes that match his heart; I wish him death. {wink}
P.S. Got your message. Forgive my procrastination -- time is not on my side.
not the seed, but the void"
This is such a unique format to use for your message ... drew me in and carried me through to the finale. Well done!
Wow. This one is powerfully and movingly penned--and that ending...breathtaking!! Exceptional poetry!
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla. :)