BRAVO! Magnificant!!

its really great

Powerfully effective verses, Debs. Thank you. Love and peace to you,

Regis

Exquisite miniature portrait of futility, paradox, and passion. Reads like a beautiful soul rumbling suppressed love far beneath the earth.
Aberjhani

Great stanzas! I especially love the last one:
"It is a desert,
searching for cartography
in some lost ocean,
where your desire shifts like dune
and scatters waves in my mind."

you managed to get me in a zen state of mind, Debs, and then stretch it with images that echo within their perfect form. love your title, too, and those paper boats. Dawn

excellent metaphors, Debs ... very visual ...

Your verses kick the stress right out of a long and difficult day, Debs. Like the gentle bubbling of a spring with its waters trickling over rocks made smooth by the passing waters of time, your words bring me back to the peacefulness of nature with its sublime beauty and tranquility, offered up to quiet and soothe my soul. Excellent write.
Take care,
Sherry

Very gentle, like origami. I like the stillness and equilibrium of mood, Debs. Makes me think of liquid art, too, paradoxically. The whole imprints on the mind like wave-marks in sand remaining as high-water ebbs away. Captures the ephemeral and elusive qualities of hope and desire like a scent on the breeze. A nice meditation. TY Kate xx

nicely done!

Sheer brilliance!!

Love Tinka

Brilliance, Debs..

"where your desire shifts like dune" is a vivid image with multiple ramifications.

Richard