Sommeil Paradoxal (poem) by Axilea MU on AuthorsDen

Reviewed on July 6, 2008

I don't believe anything escapes your pattern of thought Axilea...you find those deep interest which we all wish to either encounter...even sleep does not escape your grasp...the parralel of past and present caught up within your words of poem only finds us more and more... waiting for your next display...

nice work...

Art Sun...

Reviewed by Regis Auffray

Reviewed on July 6, 2008

A most engaging write that draws the reader into the mood and the sentiments that you have expressed via your verses. Thank you for sharing this gift, Axilea. Love and best wishes to you,

Regis

Reviewed by Sheila Roy

Reviewed on July 4, 2008

Some of your word choices remind me of that saying about things seeming better after a good night of sleep - "Rephrasing all with softer dreams" and "soothing my paradoxes". I like your show of humor towards the beginning, about the rhyme. That's something I usually don't see in your poems (the ones I've had the pleasure of reading) and its refreshing. Even here, your work takes on deep meaning within the playful lines. Nicely penned~
Sheila

Reviewed by Charlie

Reviewed on July 3, 2008

She breathed herself in, and came out in a sneeze--
wet, and alive, and smelling of breath,
she, beside herself,
in newer form.

With lizard tongue, she tasted the air

She stood, and wandered through her dreams,
(watch the tail...watch the feet
--they're massive and extinct)

She walked through lines of poetry--
and zzzzz's-- each phrase, a new phase
of herself--
a paradoxical dinosaur
feeding off of....

woops, she breathed herself in again...

Reviewed by Dark Knight (Reader)

Reviewed on July 3, 2008

loved the poetry-I must admit I will miss seeing your beauty when i leave

Reviewed by Karen Palumbo

Reviewed on July 3, 2008

There is a co-relation here, but it comes from deep within in trying to sort out that which exists, deep thoughts well expressed...

Be always safe,
Karen

Reviewed by John Flanagan

Reviewed on July 3, 2008

This is an original and worthwhile exploration and as always in your writing the effortless phrasing shines bright.
John

Reviewed by Felix Perry

Reviewed on July 3, 2008

An interesting and amusing write that explores your inner views. Enjoyed these paradoxes as I love uniqueness.

Fee

Reviewed by Cryssa C

Reviewed on July 3, 2008

"Tears have dried and sleep has come
as a surprise, velvety, taking me through its phases,
Rephrasing all with softer dreams"

A beautiful expression that exudes peace and better times...

Cryssa

Reviewed by David Hightower

Reviewed on July 3, 2008

Axilea - I enjoyed this poem very much. Other than it's subject "paradox" (different sides of the same coin?), I admired your confident voice, not a weak line anywhere. I especially like the humor of:

(I did not write �wept� for a reason

each rhyme is a treason� oh!)

and the profond peace of thelast four lines:

Rephrasing all with softer dreams

During my REM sleep,

Feeding, then soothing my paradoxes,

Exhaling, inhaling all that I am.

In a word, "Wonderful." - David

Reviewed by Bernice Angoh

Reviewed on July 3, 2008

Wao, what I have learned by just reading through these lines...great pen.

Reviewed by Deborah Munson (Reader)

Reviewed on July 3, 2008

REM -- truly the "Last Final Frontier!" -- great piece, full of intrigue, mystery and surprisingly some comfort. Well Done! Deborah

Reviewed by ~ Holly Harbridge (Reader)

Reviewed on July 3, 2008

Interesting write, well done love Holly

Reviewed by Mr. Ed

Reviewed on July 3, 2008

REM - a fascinating phenomenon, and your poem - quite thought provoking.

Reviewed by Edwin Hurdle

Reviewed on July 3, 2008

Beautifully and well thought out poem.Keep up the good work

Edwin

Reviewed by Liana Margiva

Reviewed on July 3, 2008

NICE!!!!!!!!! Liana Margiva

Reviewed by Paul Berube

Reviewed on July 3, 2008

Axilea,

Very well done. I wish I could remember just half of what I dream about. Peace, Love and Blessings Always, Paul.

Reviewed by Dawn Anderson

Reviewed on July 3, 2008

Beautiful writing, Axilea.

Reviewed by Amber Moonstone

Reviewed on July 2, 2008

Very intense, and beautiful at the same time.
I am having trouble sleeping tonight, funny I would read your poem about sleep...Interesting...
Peace, love, and light,
Amber "V"

Reviewed by Sage Sweetwater

Reviewed on July 2, 2008

Ancient slumber and opposing natures which I interpret as "crocodile tears." Someone's treason presents itself mostly in our our dream state - you wake up when someone is chasing you about to kill you or you almost jump off a cliff. There's a reason we wake up at that very defining moment...it scares us into moving on and leaving the past behind from those who have betrayed us...This has Jungian psychology written cleverly...studying Freud's dreams and Jung's dreams add up to Sommeil Paradoxal...I also note Darwinism here in that Darwin took the dragon lizard and hurled it into the ebb tide. It swam back to land again and again. No matter what he did, it would not stay in the sea. Axilea, this is a metaphor for concluding that the dragon lizard feared the sharks and came ashore where it had no enemies...sleep peacefully now.

Warmly,
Sage

Reviewed by Lois Christensen

Reviewed on July 2, 2008

I do like to dream and do most nights and remember them too. It is nice to wake up to a dream in the morning and believe that it will eventually come true if it is a nice dream, which mine mostly are. It must be what I eat before bedtime that makes me dream, I don't really know tho.

Reviewed by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner

Reviewed on July 2, 2008

Exquisite, beautifully moving poetry, Axilea, well done.

(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.