Hypocritical (Senryu) (poem) by CJ Heck on AuthorsDen

Reviewed by Taylor Ryan

Reviewed on March 2, 2007

oh CJ...such wisdom and careful observation in your well chosen words.
Love,
Taylor

Reviewed by Richard Orey

Reviewed on February 15, 2007

'Tis well to remember that the stinger sits close to the honey.

Richard

Reviewed by OnepoetGem *the Poetic Rapper

Reviewed on February 12, 2007

I'd say you did a pretty good job and quite a few could fit the verse

Reviewed by Randall Barfield

Reviewed on February 12, 2007

quite clear. oooh, don't know if i should've read this one.

Reviewed by Paul Berube

Reviewed on February 11, 2007

CJ,

This is deep and so true my friend.

Reviewed by Brett Moore

Reviewed on February 11, 2007

Very straightforward piece, CJ. Hypocritical indeed.

Brett

Reviewed by Approximately Naive

Reviewed on February 11, 2007

Or as the Psalmist puts it 'His speech is smooth as butter, yet war rages in his heart' (55:21)

Regards
Dai

Reviewed by Ron (sketchman) Axelson (Reader)

Reviewed on February 11, 2007

Too true..
Excellent write..

Reviewed by Carole Mathys

Reviewed on February 11, 2007

Very profound, CJ...
peace and love, Carole

Reviewed by jude forese

Reviewed on February 11, 2007

excellent!

Reviewed by ~ Holly Harbridge (Reader)

Reviewed on February 11, 2007

Amen to this poem CJ, Amen!!!!!!!!!!!! love Holly

Reviewed by Kimmy Van Kooten

Reviewed on February 11, 2007

Oh...this can stir many a guilty conscience...
"The fawning, sneaking, and flattering hypocrite, that will do, or be anything, for his own advantage". Stillingfleet
The ways of this world seem to be leaning in such direction...
very well done, CJ...I have yet to try a Senryu~
Isn't it fun venturing out? Smiles!
Love and Peace~
kimmy~

Reviewed by Tinka Boukes

Reviewed on February 11, 2007

THIS IS SO TRUE!!

Goodness knows I know such a person!!

Love Tinka

Reviewed by Michael Mathieu (Reader)

Reviewed on February 11, 2007

Strong and to the point,Amen on this write,
Michael

Reviewed by Jeanette Cooper

Reviewed on February 11, 2007

Woe are the sins of the vulnerable and secular man--wish we could all be Godly instead of just reaching for the Holy Grail and God's own grace. Your poem strikes a strong message.

Reviewed by Lynn Barry

Reviewed on February 11, 2007

AMEN!

Reviewed by Susan Sonnen

Reviewed on February 11, 2007

This is an excellent senryu, CJ! Isn't writing fantastic...a release of frustration!

Reviewed by Mr. Ed

Reviewed on February 11, 2007

Very powerful, CJ.

Reviewed by Alexandra* OneLight*® Authors & Creations

Reviewed on February 11, 2007

Self-appointed “anythings” always make me rather suspicious… and cautious. ;0)
This is a great first “senryu”, dear CJ. Unlike “haiku”, which must indeed be about nature, “senryu”, using the same structure and syllabic count, was classically used with a humorous, rather satirical intention. Here, you used it as a critique of one of the “snakiest” types of personality there can be – the hypocrite - and you did it brilliantly!
Love & {{{{{{{{{{hugs}}}}}}}}}
Alexandra*

Reviewed by George Thompson

Reviewed on February 11, 2007

Congrats on this senyru! Perfectly done and tells a sad tale at the same time.
George

Reviewed by Victor Buhagiar (Reader)

Reviewed on February 10, 2007

Such is man, wants to play God but always failing. Victor

Reviewed by Larry Lounsbury

Reviewed on February 10, 2007

Now this is a powerful message.

Reviewed by Sandie May Joyce (Sandie Angel)

Reviewed on February 10, 2007

Hahaha!!!!! I thought I was the only one who knew they exist...

Sandie Angel :o)

Reviewed by E T Waldron

Reviewed on February 10, 2007

Excellent ku CJ! Potent topic, point well made!

Love,
Eileen

Reviewed by Sue Hess

Reviewed on February 10, 2007

yes i've known a few..regrettably even her at ad

Reviewed by Kate Clifford (Reader)

Reviewed on February 10, 2007

Fantastic hard hitting Senryu!

Reviewed by Joyce Bowling

Reviewed on February 10, 2007

Great job CJ you've said much in few words, just as it should be with Senryu...you've given one a prompt to self examine....enjoyed this. I also admire you for trying a new style...I've got something on my mind and heart to try soon...great job CJ!!!
Blessings,
Joyce B...

Reviewed by - - - - - TRASK

Reviewed on February 10, 2007

El Presidnete Bush Sez: God Bless You But, Has Blown Over $1 Trillion+ $100 Billion Your $TAXPAYERS MONEY$On Iraq War,i.e. HATE-HUH!

Neat...

TRASK

Reviewed by Felix Perry

Reviewed on February 10, 2007

Well for a first attempt I think you rang the bell for sure with this strong message that rings out in truth against those who deserve it. Well done CJ.

Fee

Reviewed by Karen Vanderlaan

Reviewed on February 10, 2007

NICE JOB! GOOD FOR A REALITY CHECK AS WELL

Reviewed by H. Lena Jones

Reviewed on February 10, 2007

Hey CJ, that's good. Vulgarity is also not a Godly trait. Great Senryu! Shocks the senses, I think. :)

God Bless
Love always
Lena

Reviewed by Rusty Daily

Reviewed on February 10, 2007

CJ, This is one of the better examples of using brevity to speak volumes. It required talent and bravery to post this excellent reminder to all of us to be what you are in voice and spirit and nothing else. Thank you
loveya
Rusty

Reviewed by Susan de Vegter

Reviewed on February 10, 2007

Yes!There's one or two of them around. Just know that you see them as they are and forgive them. They'll hate that.
Great Senryn.
Susan

Reviewed by Zahala San Simone

Reviewed on February 10, 2007

Hi CJ,

This seems to be more of a senryu, since a haiku is generally about nature...Nevertheless, you've nailed the syllabic count--with a stinging line 1. Nice work.

Wendi

Reviewed by K. Mulroney

Reviewed on February 10, 2007

Now that hits BACK! I had to re-track everyone that I was tracking because the site is not going to correct whatever went wrong. So I am not recieving emails when you post! Bout time eh? Great stuff!