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Love's Powers Love's Perils Love.....
Photography Artist: http://ca6e1ad5.deviantart.com/ You I loved you, beyond the color of sorrows darkness… Behind the coral of orange blooms I sought…love Yours… You were like the faint dust speaking into the wind; The caress of perfume that roses bring; An essence hinting perfection… I touched the thorns of passage that severed the heart of my soul…You… The passions unleashed…beyond all reasons control… I am lost…lost in this emotion some call love… I feel like a drifter harbored into the depth of forbidden caves….seeking only to find your touch… The hand of a master which opens the hidden gates of my secrets… Secrets of passages…There is you… Like a thief steals the gold from a kingdom, who left me? Who, in the dew drops of fantasy longing? I do…long & yearn for you… My thoughts I feel…To love you forevermore… The dream of a lover…You….Which never belonged to me… I am the thief, The pawn of sacrifice…Within a losers kingdom… I held the lock… Securely, within the heart of my embrace, without the realization of needing a key… I have no key…I am imprisoned to you… Damaged in love is where my heart now falls free; Longing in the loss of my dreams without you; Perished like a tarnished jewel unseen; Buried beneath the emotions of hope… The faith I had…that no-one could see… I held this precious perfection; I inhaled the essence of divinity; In blessings I honored the gift… You…Love… A treasure I should have known would never be mine… (Written: July 3^rd, 2008 7:03 p/m) In Joy, In Peace, In Grace, In Harmony of Love Embraced ~ Embrassé poétesse d'amour ~ poétesse romantique Copyright© 2008 Victoria L. McColley

Reviewed by Robby Baby Poet of Amour (Reader)

Reviewed on September 1, 2008

Wow...what a powerful piece...one of your best. This was quite moving, a truly beautiful piece, beautiful as art as well as poetry. As is said in another review here, very bittersweet.

If I were you by being me,
what would the meaning of this defining be?

If you were I,
one soul but free,
where would your border end,
when merging with the essence of me?

You are I when I am trying to so fiercly to be me,
but I feel so far from free,
when I try to be a you that doesn't suit me.

I am you when defining divinity,
but I feel apostate,
when I am you in such a manner,
that belittles the honesty of me.

Let me be you,
while you I let be me,
but only when such sharings,
set both souls free,
to experiences with no bittersweetness,
wondrous experiences of love being free.

Robert M

Reviewed by Jon Willey

Reviewed on July 21, 2008

you have left my once clean slate -- awash with raw emoting -- my heart beating faster from the wounds -- yea, I like this one Vickie --may your voice of love be carried on the wind --JMW

Reviewed by Bernice Angoh

Reviewed on July 20, 2008

Every word is magical, bittersweet too, but who wouldn't love to be the receiver of such thoughts and longing????

Reviewed by Debra Baker

Reviewed on July 18, 2008

Vicoria, I saved this one to my library. You write passion with just depth and beauty. I can't wait for that book. I'll be a first in line to purchase. Bravo!

Reviewed by H Cruz

Reviewed on July 17, 2008

You speak of love so effortlessly, indeed it is a speacial person who can make this seem easy. ;)

Reviewed by Blue Sleighty

I'm going to get down to the nut cutting, here. YOU WRITE F*CKING BEAUTIFULLY. Yes, the sentiment is beautiful and well expressed (quite consistently in all of your work)- but it's more than that. I have been touched and enthralled by everything of yours that I have read. But, it's more than just liking the poem, for me. I find your style, your rythym and your point of view to be very appealing. I can relate to you.

I look forward to more!

I wish you all of the success in the world!

Regards,
Blue

Reviewed by Elizabeth Price

unremitant love is heartbreaking. Great sensual write. Liz

Reviewed by Jill curry (Reader)

hauntingly beautiful

Reviewed by Regis Auffray

Wow. I'd love to be recipient of such feelings. Powerfully expressed, Vickie. Thank you for sharing this gift. Love and best wishes,

Regis xo

Reviewed by Edwin Hurdle

Hi Vicky,you write such beautiful,romantic,emotional and intriguing poetry.Its always a pleasure reading your works.take care

Edwin

Reviewed by Rose Rideout

Vicky I believe at times we have all been guilty of being a thief, wanting to take that wht is forbidden never to be known, A treasure we know will never be ours.
Your words are beautiful and steal my heart within them. Thank you for sharing.

Newfie hugs, Rose

Reviewed by Georg Mateos

"...I am the thief...I held the lock..." reproaching, yet, declaring feelings that only two know and only two can share.
Like a cup of sweet tea with a few drops of lemon.

Georg

Reviewed by Karen Palumbo

Reviewed on July 16, 2008

Such bittersweet, raw emotions that just come dripping off the page so gracefully, beautiful...

Be always safe,
Karen

Reviewed by Gene Williamson

Victoria, it's past midnight and I said to myself: I think
I'll read the Romantic Poetess before turning in. Mistake.
Beautifully done...But it's going to be a fitful sleep.
-gene.

Reviewed by Richard Orey

You give new meaning and depth to the classic lines of the great Kahlil Gibran:

"And ever has it been that love
Knows not its own depth
Until the hour of separation."

But here you search for "A treasure I should have known would never be mine."

My dearest Vickie, you are indeed the Mistress of Romantic Poetry.
And your pictures leave me breathless, dazzled and spellbound! I've got my scissors in hand. I'm takin' this one with me. Whooeee!
With love and cherished respect,
Richard

Reviewed by Amber Moonstone

Vickie, This is beyond passion, this is soul wrenchingly beautiful and heart touched...
My goodness these lines grabbed me ever so firmly:

"The dream of a lover�You�.Which never belonged to me�

I am the thief,

The pawn of sacrifice�Within a losers kingdom�

I held the lock�

Securely, within the heart of my embrace,

without the realization of needing a key�

I have no key�I am imprisoned to you�

Very powerful emotional words, I can say without a doubt you are The Poetesse d'amour

Much love, light, and peace dear friend,
Amber "V"