BEAUTIFUL!!!!!!!!!!!!! Liana Margiva

Excellent Dawn! I can feel the dispair,,
Christine

Andy said it. Very close to home for more than a few, I reckon. How do we understand that love which seems to be more of an apology or a brick wall than a passion for the person so "loved"? In such instances, it can seem to be more of a mutual gaol sentence than a wide and spacious place in which to live and grow. Love and contentment are basic to what a marriage bond should be all about. There is nothing so lonely in a relationship as emotional distance, and, if it is insurmountable, the pain of maintaining futile channels of communication can bring sickness on both the body and mind. Yes, destruction, really. Painful and harrowing write, Dawn. But we often press on, Come What May. Bless you for this, Kate xx

You demonstrate the pain of your character in these descriptive words. Well done.

Such a sad, sad write... communicating so much...if...if only they but listen...

Cryssa

Inner reflections of what one keeps hidden within the soul....

Be always safe,
Karen

such a sad but meaningful write--well expressed

Very poignant and sad to think that love has gone that badly.

Fee

This reads like the opening of a Hardy type novel.
Yet I know of so many women who are living this life of purgatory. Giving everything, hoping things will change, whilst her soul is systematically destroyed...

This is deep! She speaks what she wants and if it's given what a joy but if not, it is her doom....Love it!

You can go there... and you do! This is creative, and brash, along with the boldness of shy before the storm. I may have read more here than is written, but it's good poetry, and I like it.
- Bill

The right look at the right time, accompanied by a soft, warm smile can evoke unexpected feelings - perhaps "surrender" transforms to forgiveness - to acceptance?

One of the heaviest poem I've see you write, at least in my way of thinking . . . A woman mistreated . . .Same woman next verse giving penance to his reluctant forgiveness . . . He now knows what he wants out of life and it is smooth sailing with her in last verse . . . The kicker, the couplet is dynamite inside her heart and soul . . . WELL FRIGGIN' DONE DAWN

Dawn,

Poignant lesson in here, to keep the doors of communication, open - well done.

(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.

Dawn,

Sounds like a sad Mother's Day poem. Perhaps silence is what got them to that situation in the first place. Communication always helps but if one will not listen then both parties lose. Peace, Love and Blessings Always, Paul.