This is a great exercise Dawn, finding inspiration in an old movie and trying to guess the exact emotion and motives of the characters.
I love the "morning crossword" look, I can almost see it.
Dawn - This poem reads like one of the classic movies. Love that first stanza and how the rest of the poem expresses that fear that if the narrator shows her love too honestly that the loved one will be overcome and run in fright. - David
You have an amazing talent for expressing your characters' feelings. You manage to develop them in such a short time; you give them an authentic feel. Plus, those feelings are complex, just like ours, which can be difficult to do. One of your many talents shines here.
Sheila
Yikes, this poem is tight, concise, deep, powerful and somewhat sorrowful all wrapped up within a sense of tension which gives it it's strength. Your physiology here is enviable. Well done. Hugs, J'nia
LOVELY!!!!!!!!!!!! '...and still, I remain silent, in fear that you may run from me'------------ BEAUTIFUL!!!!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE THIS!!!!!!!!!!!! Liana Margiva
Can relate greatly to the ambivalence in this, Dawn. As always, your psychological studies of our most intimate moments as couples are so clear and sharply focussed, speaking volumes in so few words. I am always in awe of the way you are able to totally capture personalities that are fully developped in our minds with just one or two well-observed, deft images. You leave us with a sense of both trepidation and anticipation - great writing, in other words! :)) xx
Reviewed by Gianetta Ellis (Reader)
Reviewed on September 28, 2009
I love old movies - I'll have to watch for this one! I agree with others that "the air hangs thick with all my unsaid words" is terrific and all too relatable.
Your first stanza is my favorite, but you portrayed perfectly those moments where time stands uncomfortably still & the air is crowded with words and thoughts colliding without a sound.
She was a force wasn't she?
and your insight here is moving,
I especially like:
"yet the air hangs thick
with all my unsaid words."
A good one dear Dawn.
Blessings ...
Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader)
Reviewed on September 28, 2009
Loved the sexpot Lana even if she did kill her lover and let her daughter take the fall. She always did go for the rough trade, too bad I was too young for her . . .
I liked this / It moved me because of the Catch-22 she found herself in / Wanting to move toward her goal, but deathly afraid it would case him away. Yep. Good.
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Regis
I love the "morning crossword" look, I can almost see it.
Axilea
wonderful work, Dawn ...
Sheila
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
Georg
John
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fee
I too saw that film;-) love the old ones,nothing made today matches them.
yet the air hangs thick
with all my unsaid words.
There's something terribly wrong with the guy who would run
from Lana...or you.
-gene.
Cryssa
Walk softly and many peaceful moments ....Steve
and your insight here is moving,
I especially like:
"yet the air hangs thick
with all my unsaid words."
A good one dear Dawn.
Blessings ...
I liked this / It moved me because of the Catch-22 she found herself in / Wanting to move toward her goal, but deathly afraid it would case him away. Yep. Good.