Life (poem) by David J Delaney on AuthorsDen

Life
by David J Delaney → (All Poetry by David J Delaney)
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Just like life..........

Life Heavy rain falls to ground Puddles forming all around Trickles begin, same with life Journey start’s to experience joy, strife. Moving forward, as a baby crawls Overcoming obstacles, even some falls Building in size, growing stronger Now a stream, a trickle no longer. Flowing free, picking up pace Stay the course; life’s not a race Decisions made, are your choices Don’t listen to negative voices. Youthful rapids slash through life’s canyons Wild foaming fury thundering like cannons Not to be tamed at this point in time Rushing through, no stopping traveling blind. Bristling through forests, giving life to others Birds, fish, animals, suckling young mothers Entering new phase’s, growing wider Negotiating bends, becoming wiser. Subdued, now joined by a tributary Together, heading to your destiny Through vibrant cities, river life goes on Its beauty embraced in many a song. This old river’s seen death, life and fools Those caught in never-ending whirlpools A wrong decision, you suffer your fate Spending time behind a locked gate. Your time, nearing its end Not far, around the next bend Started as a trickle, now a river so grand Admired, respected all over this land. Ending life’s tale so very near Always, someone will shed a tear At last the ocean, flowing soon to cease Finishing this journey, forever now at peace. David J Delaney (copywrited)

Reviewed by Lois Christensen

Reviewed on July 12, 2008

Stay positive with your writes. I can see the positiveness in this write. And the truth too. Know from way back when that a river empties into the sea (ocean). Love ocean too and find it to be peaceful when around it. Good writing skills you do have too. You are to be commended.

Reviewed by Quanda Graves

Reviewed on July 9, 2008

I must say David, you truly have a gift. I'm a fan. Life is truly this way. Thanks for blessing us with this poem, now bless the world and put it in a book. Then let me know, I'll buy. :)

Until...

Reviewed by Karen Palumbo

Reviewed on July 8, 2008

You bring all the sounds to life in this lovely piece, beautiful and even flow throughout....

Be always safe,
Karen

Reviewed by Barbara Smith

David, I truly liked the metaphors you used in this piece. I loved the rhyme & rhythm, the flow, and your written words made your voice sound strong in certainty to this reader. The visual images were also fantastic and painted a beautiful canvas. I'd say this is a keeper.

Reviewed by George Carroll

Haven't read life as you have painted it but it surely is one of the best I have read. Great metaphors.

Reviewed by Liana Margiva

I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!! Liana Margiva

Reviewed by Sandie May Joyce (Sandie Angel)

Life is a lot of baby steps, challenges, and triumphs. When we don't succeed, we fall, and we stand up and try again. When we succeed, we conquer life's obstacles.

Sandie May :o)