There before a fountain,
caught by the twilight,
watching all the colors bleed
from a failing sky,
There's a scent of lavender
winding all around me.
Time stands still and I can see
forever in your eyes.
Wild--as the roses
growing in my garden--
Wild--as the windsong
stirring the leaves--
she leaves me breathless--
Eventide settles in,
the night is under way.
Pale stars appear, one by one,
lost souls on display.
We kiss in the silence
and share a single breath.
I've waited my whole life for
this final taste of Death.
Wild--as the roses
growing in my garden--
Wild--as the windsong
stirring the leaves--
she leaves me dead--
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A Gothic Rock ballad/not for the faint of heart.
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Found this piece to have much ambiance, although I didn't "get" the undertones, hence, again, the 9 and a half. Again, this author weaves spells with words....
Loved:
watching all the colors bleed
from a failing sky,
There's a scent of lavender
winding all around me.
lost souls on display.
d share a single breath.
Found this unsettling:
I've waited my whole life for
this final taste of Death.
Lee,
This is wonderful!!! I agree with everyone!
I adore this...
"There before a fountain,
caught by the twilight,
watching all the colors bleed
from a failing sky,
There's a scent of lavender
winding all around me.
Time stands still and I can see
forever in your eyes."
AND
"Pale stars appear, one by one,
lost souls on display.
We kiss in the silence
and share a single breath.
I've waited my whole life for
this final taste of Death."
That is Breathtaking! The whole poem is
very entrancing, Excellent Write!
Hugs,
Maria
Reviewed by Madame X (Reader)
Reviewed on August 20, 2002
Lee, this is really good. I didn't expect the ending and was taken off guard. Anytime you can do that---it's well done.
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Loved:
watching all the colors bleed
from a failing sky,
There's a scent of lavender
winding all around me.
lost souls on display.
d share a single breath.
Found this unsettling:
I've waited my whole life for
this final taste of Death.
This is wonderful!!! I agree with everyone!
I adore this...
"There before a fountain,
caught by the twilight,
watching all the colors bleed
from a failing sky,
There's a scent of lavender
winding all around me.
Time stands still and I can see
forever in your eyes."
AND
"Pale stars appear, one by one,
lost souls on display.
We kiss in the silence
and share a single breath.
I've waited my whole life for
this final taste of Death."
That is Breathtaking! The whole poem is
very entrancing, Excellent Write!
Hugs,
Maria
Amor
Kathy