Abraham (poem) by Julianza (Julie) Kim Shavin on AuthorsDen

Abraham
by Julianza (Julie) Kim Shavin → (All Poetry by Julianza (Julie) Kim Shavin)
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I played a Yamaha electric piano once for a holiday home tour gig, and fell in abject love with the "choir" setting, which my keyboards do not have. I have updated this poem to correct the rhythm. It is basically the same poem, I had been reluctant to say only "keys," as in "two keys," but that is what is necessary unless I can think of a substitute. But anyway, I wanted to correct the rhythm, since after all, this is a poem about music. Not. I am a great fan of internal rhyme and false rhyme. I hope it works here.
Abraham Like hosannahs over Yahweh I hail "used Yamaha! Buy it for me now!” And you say “yes yes! Just whom do I pay?” But I was only joking. I have two keys already Three would be decadence. Perhaps it was a test I trying to make of you some Abraham, to see what or whom you'd slay for me. I know it's not these things you want to purchase with passion's currency, it's me, but unfortunately I'm not for sale, and cannot be. So chase no gleaming keys kill no kings or only-sons part no seas, nor speak in tongues Love is enough; its proof resounds Leave that trembling boy unbound. Copyright Julianza Shavin 2008

Reviewed by Regis Auffray

Reviewed on October 7, 2008

I shall simply echo what has already been expressed below. Thank you, Julianza. Love and best wishes,

Regis

Reviewed by Gene Williamson

what a poem! what craftsmanship! what a woman!
i continue to read in awe of you great talent, Julie.
-gene.

Reviewed by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner

Stunning, multilayered write - one cannot just skim, they have to delve in and let the meanings wash over them - beautiful. The ending leaves me wondering about the boy: is he the man afraid to dream? Well done, Julianza.

(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.

Reviewed by Androsedek Malkye (Reader)

It pleases me to send greetings to Poet Julie (Julianza) K. Shavin.

I have read several of your works, but due to my limited leisure time I couldn't comment on them.

I am very impressed with your style, and the subjects that you deal wisely and artistically. Your works made me learn, and gave me reasons to admire them.

"Abraham" is by all means ~ a masterpiece of the twenty-first century's Poetry.

Thank you for posting this page to glow on the pages of The American Fine Letters.