Dreams only fade if we don't act. Sometimes a dream is meant to fade, and the longing misplaced. Perhaps Fading Dreams is the perfect title to this very exquisite poem.
Carmen :-)
Reviewed by Cynthia Castle (Reader)
Reviewed on August 7, 2004
Retta, Very beautiful, heartfelt longing in this exquisite write! Dreams gives one hope, and fading dreams cause the hope to fade! When we truly find someone to share our dreams, then the hope and the dreams never die! ...May you have sweet dreams and keep the hope alive, Dear Poet!
Hmmm, your first stanza says many things. You have analyzed it as:
"A dark dream,
Lonely and stark,
Empty and devoid of life,
My trees leafless,
The world was empty and cold…"
This is a great poem, and/or perhaps maybe this dream, is a subconscious plea for self recognition, self assertiveness and life change. However, you certainly have talent and mastery over your creative poetry indeed!
Reviewed by Vesna Perkovic (Reader)
Reviewed on August 6, 2004
But the distance is too great,
And you are too far away,
The day is ending,
Beginning to fade,
..only too well do I know this...
I'm saving this Retta..ty!!
vesna :)
Reviewed by Thomas Lanechanger (Reader)
Reviewed on August 6, 2004
Retta, this is an exceptionally powerful piece of longing poetry. Dreams never fade away, only ones ability to reach out for them does. One can only hear and make an informed decision based upon what is spoken directly to them. I loved this piece as I do everything I’ve ever read of your timeless creations, Poet. You have a very rare gift, and you use it to the max! Great work!
I agree with so many others below, Retta, that you are incredible at this form of expression. This has a ghost-like quality to it, and yet clarity and sharpness of focus, too. Your desire to make connection, almost as if from another world, is tangible. I am sure that like fresh, green shoots spring forth from percieved dead wood, there will be a new springtime for you and your dreams... but the thought that they are "telling you what you must do" is very powerful and perhaps a challenge. Loved the lines "Truth and lies, Lying side by side..." Atmospheric and evocative. TY Kate xx
I dream a lot. I can relate to this write, Retta. Well-expressed and soul-gripping. Love and peace. Regis
Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader)
Reviewed on August 5, 2004
Your words were sublime and cruel. This poem, this dream, had every element in your life that was important to you and it was attempt to convey the shallowness of all that importance. This was more vision than dream.
God this is lonely and sad when the days pass by and each night it is the same as the one before. great words of truth for many people.
Well said.
Susan
Reindeer, no one writes dark poems as well as you!
You have a real gift for it,funny how those parts of our
experiences, though sad, makes for our best poetry!
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Cynthia
Sandie May Angel
this is an emotionally charged dynamo--excellent write! well done!
(((HUGS))) and love, karla. :)
"A dark dream,
Lonely and stark,
Empty and devoid of life,
My trees leafless,
The world was empty and cold…"
This is a great poem, and/or perhaps maybe this dream, is a subconscious plea for self recognition, self assertiveness and life change. However, you certainly have talent and mastery over your creative poetry indeed!
And you are too far away,
The day is ending,
Beginning to fade,
..only too well do I know this...
I'm saving this Retta..ty!!
vesna :)
Tommy
Such a nice and truely thought ...
I liked this a lot
Thanks for sharing this
TRASK
Love
Peter
Well said.
Susan
mine have. ;) Dream on dreamer!
M.Rose
Love Tinka
Well written drak write Rein....
enjoyed much
William
So poignant and so incredibly
well written. I hope he does
come soon.
Warm hugs
Elga
You have a real gift for it,funny how those parts of our
experiences, though sad, makes for our best poetry!