A Response to the 16 word challenge at firesidepoetry.com. Words to use:
Redemption, agony, filth, aloof, seduction, sarcasm, season, meaning
nothingness, foretold, behold, sold, care, sear, fear, reason,
Spotted Owl’s Dream
They stood above us,
Aloof and distant,
When they spoke down to us,
We heard the sarcasm in their voice,
“Behold,” they said in strident tones,
“We have come to save you from your filth,
We shall teach you reason,
And how to speak like us,”
So they took our children,
And sold our land,
Tricked by the seduction of peace and harmony,
But their treaties and false words,
Had no meaning,
In agony we realized too late,
Our future was dead,
A gray nothingness lay before us,
We were betrayed.
But Spotted Owl had a dream...
He saw our Redemption in blazing clarity,
Though they attempted to sear our hearts,
With fear and self loathing;
He foretold of a time when we would be free again!
“This season of tears will pass”, he told us,
As we stood in the high desert reservation,
Where they chained us to the past-
“We shall rise again,
And be one with the Great Spirit!
Our hopes renewed,
Our sacred circle mended!
Our children’s Children will return home,
And the ancient ways will be restored!
We shall care for the Mother Earth once more,
Her gifts will flow in our blood,
And the people will live as one!”
His dream is coming true ,
Our people are finding their hearts,
Our grandchildren are learning the old ways,
Taught to see the beauty in life,
To hold true to the sacred circle,
We live as one with the Great Spirit,
Our people are home!
Captivating poetry! Excellent usage of the words and it contains every bit of your trademark passion. I am in awe of your artistry.
Reviewed by Thomas Lanechanger (Reader)
Reviewed on September 15, 2004
Retta, you have met and surpassed the challenge with this stunningly well-penned inspiring composition. Thank you for sharing it and your remarkable talent. Take care and be well.
This poem made me feel very warm and peaceful inside,it is a really beautiful poem and I hope it comes true,I would like to see that
happen when the Earth is cared for by those who love her best!
Best wishes to you and yours always
from
kay
This is a wonderful parable and a perfect Redemption of what had been taken away. May there be a total restoration and right ways forward to build bridges of mutual love and respect through the wisdom and integrity of the world's children who won't bear to repeat the mistakes of their forebears. You are such a wonderful story-teller, Retta, with such strong voice and visuals. This has blown the challenge out of the water, I would say! All words effortlessly and seamlessly interwoven into your skillful tapestry. I hope it will be hung somewhere for all to see! Bless you, Kate xx
In a post-coup America, an Illinois farm boy is drawn into the resistance by his brother's death. Captured, he is given a choice: betray his friends, or the girl he loves will be lobotomized.
I was hooked from the beginning
William ....peace & Love
and spirit....this is outstanding!!!
happen when the Earth is cared for by those who love her best!
Best wishes to you and yours always
from
kay
You met the challenge exceptionally well with an outstanding composition, well done Retta.
warm hugs
Elga
And be one with the Great Spirit!
I truly hope that Spotted Owl's Dream comes true.
Magnificent poem, Reindeer.
How Beautiful!
You do wonders with your poetry!
Excellent!
Becca
Beautiful!!!
Deborah :o))
WoW - I always expect good poetry here, but this is truly inspired writing ! Totally outstanding! I'm saving this one in my library ...
"We shall care for the Mother Earth once more,
Her gifts will flow in our blood,
And the people will live as one!"
Loved this line " He saw our Redemption in blazing clarity, "
Gorgeous use of words....
Peter
I enjoyed this very much.
Love,Bonnie
Great writing!
Andrea
Outstanding! An inspired write from the spirit of truth!
Brava!
Quite a fascinating picture, and your prose is superb ... a truly soulful poem!
Robert
Sandie May Angel
Great Unique Different Write,i.e. Only Physical Body Is Your Own Prison!
While You Are In It You As I Must(Care For It) Survive It!
TRASK
sueb
Enjoyed.
this is hauntingly beautiful and sends chills up and down my spine with its power and intensity--WOW
you've penned another keeper--and that art *ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhh*
thank you
(((HUGS))) and love, karla. :)
Love Tinka