He said;
Write me a poem,
Tell me the colors you see in your mind,
Describe the sky and the moon,
Tell me what the sun looks like at noon...
But I am lost,
For how do I describe color to a blind man,
How to tell him the sky is the color of truth,
When all he knows are lies,
How do I tell him that the sun burns with life,
When his heart is dead inside of him?
How do I tell him that the moon shines
With the color of love,
All aglow in silvery light,
When he is so blinded by the darkness of his life?
He said;
You talk like a poem,
I want you to write me a poem,
Telling me what you feel when you see me…
And I was at a loss for words,
For how can write about how love feels,
When I am feeling it alone,
And he knows not the meaning of the word?
How do I say that love should be about,
Truth and honesty,
That you know in your heart,
Though you are apart,
You are never alone…
He said;
Write me a poem about love…
I looked into his dark eyes,
And whispered softly;
Love?
Love?
I know not the word…
powerful and exquisite write, as only you can do, reindeer...awesome job! brava!
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in tx., karen lynn. :D
got the response to wyndi's letter up; check it out! think you may enjoy it! :)
Reviewed by Tracey L. O' Very (Reader)
Reviewed on May 19, 2005
Exquisite! ...the sun that burns with life... the moon shines
with the color of love...
This is Magnificent. So real and true. How does one describe color?
Superb!
Thank you so much.
Tracey
This proves to me that, indeed Sis Reindeer, you DO know the word.
cynth'ya
Reviewed by D May (Reader)
Reviewed on May 7, 2005
Your poetry is wonderful. So honest and deep always. I have been where you are and you describe it well. Scrape it right from the bone. Excellent work.
Pressing many buttons all at once for me here, Retta. This is so beautiful, laced with profound truth; and the heartache, longing but sense of misunderstanding/miscommunication is agonising: the knowledge that, at a deep level, if there is not the immediate emotional connection and traffic continuously channelling these feelings of a mutual love and understanding, then no amount of verbal usage will fix it. What really haunts me personally is the feeling I have reading this that it is the emotionally open one who always takes the blame upon themselves for the "failure" and inability to inarticulate; ironic, given that that person is probably the most fluent in such speech and thought. Emotionally honest and searingly potent. TY Kate xx
Not Nor Love Only Dove
Of Who Friendship Know Not You
Like Many Have Passed Gone Any
Never Have I Met Could And Yet
Be(Have Been) a True Friend Like You...
Reindeer, you see better than most into the
very soul of life, your poetry always shows
the depths of your intuitive heart...
splendid poem!
etw-alrisha
Reviewed by Joel Raja Kumar J (Reader)
Reviewed on May 2, 2005
You always manage to leave me awed at the splendor of your deep poems with so much within them. I can relate to this for I was once in love with one who is blind to love and knew no truth. Good work and good luck.
This is a great write with depth and insight.
You are the poem indeed that is yet to be written.
Even the blind with agree that this one is excellently written.
You rightly pointed out that love is the poem, no other.
I agree.
Beautiful words Retta, straight from your gentle
heart. You have such a talent for reaching into
your intermost being and writing a masterpiece with
feelings and a pen. AWESOME
Know the truth and you shall be set free; i like the use of the blind man as "everyman" to describe how each of us is blinded by lies and deceit and will never know love until we are honest with ourselves.
Reviewed by Ron (sketchman) Axelson (Reader)
Reviewed on May 2, 2005
Wow, this one is wonderfully different...
Great work Retta....
Have a wonderful day..
Thanks for writing us a poem.....
Wilth a firm belief that the blind are us - with eyes closed, I say to write that poem! Perhaps, we assume too easily, that they lack full emotional experiences and all that goes with them. Your words are deep and challenging to each of us. Thank you for this. - Bill
wow Retta this is one of the best romance/hurting poems I have read in quite a while. I can feel the aching and longing in your heart for what love might have been. My arms want to encompass you and say that there is still love out there just for you. Passionate write my dear.
Felix
Who is the blind one when we cannot explain that love is like the water he bathes in, and the water he drinks when he is full of thirst, it is something that keeps him warm on a cold day but never leaves him or goes astray. It fills him with joy and laughter when it brushes his hair, and cools like a breeze on a hot day. Splendid write, Retta
'Better Without You'is a compelling narrative that explores the complexities of an affair, hidden secrets, and abuse. It also highlights a daughter's heartfelt journey as she cares for her mother who is battling dementia.
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(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in tx., karen lynn. :D
got the response to wyndi's letter up; check it out! think you may enjoy it! :)
with the color of love...
This is Magnificent. So real and true. How does one describe color?
Superb!
Thank you so much.
Tracey
cynth'ya
I feel this and can sympathize completely....just incredible
evan
I will keep this jewel
thanks for sharing
William .....Peace & Love
Isn't that the way Retta! Who can
really describe it?
you made me think about this one ... i found this poem to have a most intriguing and thought-provoking premise ...
Not Nor Love Only Dove
Of Who Friendship Know Not You
Like Many Have Passed Gone Any
Never Have I Met Could And Yet
Be(Have Been) a True Friend Like You...
c 2005 TRASK
Your Friend, TRASK
Paul;-]
Ah, this is pure poetry--stunning emotion that leaves me awed--you are the poem!
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla. :( *tears*
Elizabeth
A delighful and endearing poetic write that soothes the soul ... exquisite!!
Blessings,
Robert
very soul of life, your poetry always shows
the depths of your intuitive heart...
splendid poem!
etw-alrisha
Love from India - Joel -
You are the poem indeed that is yet to be written.
Even the blind with agree that this one is excellently written.
You rightly pointed out that love is the poem, no other.
I agree.
Emeka
He said;
Write me a poem about love…
I looked into his dark eyes,
And whispered softly;
Love?
Love?
I know not the word…
Loads of things to think and ponder upon...clap clap clap....love n luck....BHUWAN!!!
Great poem, Retta! And the graphic is lovely, too.
heart. You have such a talent for reaching into
your intermost being and writing a masterpiece with
feelings and a pen. AWESOME
Jack
Great work Retta....
Have a wonderful day..
Thanks for writing us a poem.....
Felix
Love Tinka