Deep Down (poem) by Chels Duncan on AuthorsDen

Deep Down
by Chels Duncan → (All Poetry by Chels Duncan)
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Another chain whips across my back Another night sleeping outside Another moment in time Another beating The force of his feet across my back Another chance for me to escape Another night spent hiding Another man hunt Another threat Chained to a pole Spat upon Beaten Trodden into the ground.... Another burst of pain As the alien pushes from between my legs Another element to bring me pain Don’t want to hear it cry He said I dont want to see it when i want you He said. Another child burnt in the furnace Another box buried at the bottom of the garden Anotther hidey hole Another place . Electric wires across the door My home Another beating Another threat More pain When will it end Musn’t let her cry I said She’s gone She will live with me He said . She’s free i don’t care I said . The bright glare from the sun The camera flashes What happened How did you survive They said Nothing I said . I kept my promise to him i didn’t tell them what we had What happened between us I knew I knew Deep down he loved me Deep down he was sorry for what he did Deep down he loved his kids deep down he loved me deep down .

Reviewed by Andy Turner

Reviewed on June 28, 2010

Another, another, another... is like a oncoming steam-train of pain never letting up.
The poem whacks the reader, winds the reader, angers the reader.
Tight write, I feel that it was written spontaneously.
It is effective and affective.
Richard is on the money.

Reviewed by Karen Palumbo

Reviewed on May 20, 2010

Deep down, but sometimes the realities can be very harsh, God bless...

Be always safe,
Karen

Reviewed by Richard King

I've just read all of your poems, nicely done. I gather this is based in truth. There's a place for people like the guy you write about, but apparently they haven't dug his yet. Let's hope that oversight is corrected soon.

Dick

Reviewed by Carin Spirit

This is poignantly sad, but good always! prevails Be Well, Carin and keep the faith.

Reviewed by Amber Moonstone

Chels, This is so intensely written, as if a "safe" confession. I know that the horrors of captivity can be devastingly brutal and scarring to the soul...If this is a true dipiction of something that has happened to you or a loved one, they really must get out of this situation, get help and be free of someone that has abused them beyond human reckoning. It is so sad to believe that this could actually happen in the day and age..God willing this is fiction.

You are an amazing writer, never stop!!!!

Much peace, love, and angel light my dear one,
Amber