Jeff, just as the right music can invoke an emotional response so does your writing in this piece and several of your others I had the pleasure of enjoying today. Dave

[Debra meant to say:

"Sometimes it takes TIME to build up the inner fortitude to traverse that darkness."

One of yur best yet Jeff...and I am so slow to even discover it despite the notice. Sometmes our best work comes from emotional pain as we reach into ourselves and spill all the colors of self. But here, you allow the reader the pallet and the brush just as you reach out to those who surround your pallor of slate.
Love,
Taylor

outstanding metaphor and analogy, Jeff ... your true colors shine through this excellent work ...

I don't think there was anything about this poem that I didn't like. The imagery is wonderful, and the rhyme scheme is done ever so nicely. The last line says it all well done.
debra

'paint my color true' ... Beautiful expression Jeff!
Beautiful poem ... I agree with your wisdom!
Love, Suzie :-D

Hmm ~ perhaps it is only your suit that is dark. When I was thrown into slavery, it was with my hands tied and drugs forced down my throat. I am white as snow and as cold as the icycle on the rear seat of my bike.

I have said it before and I'll say it again..YOU are a Master Poet!
..by Jove this is superb..wow!
..saved this one..thanks Jeff!


vesna:)

Hello Jeff..what a powerful painting of words expressing your many moods. Thank you for stopping by and leaving a comment on my post..am going to put you on my tracking list..thanks for sharing.. I also liked your other post called "Numb"--

Jeff, this is a well thought out writing...I LOVED IT! The images, metaphor, voice and flow are great. Thanks for sharing such a beautiful poem.

"feel the tendrils of your brush
obscure the canvas of my soul"

Raw and beautiful work Jeff......

Peace,

Bill

I feel ya' Jeff
This may be DARk, but it's bright in the mind!
This is a gem!
A treasure I plan to savorrrrrr!

Warmly, WArrior Lady Sheeeoox
Chin up!
This too shall pass, GREAT Pen you have!
YOur structure and imagery is GRAND!
I am impressed with your word ususage.

A palette of metaphor, this poetry canvas balanced in the easel groove, brushstroke of excellence...before this paint dries, write another poem of this caliber and hang it in this Den with all of the other fine art represented here, Jeff...paint of me a picture dark gains respect for the use of feelings and moods, tenderness, caring, and sharing...

Sage

Jeff,

W o W --I was feeling like this the other day. You painted my mood e x a c t l y!!

(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.

Thank God I saw the Light, the rainbow after the darkness of the storm: hope you see yours, soon.

Awsome write!

I love the concepts here, Jeff, and the paradoxes of mood and emotion in the discovery and highlighting of the more monotone shades. Interestingly, this has the effect of bringing these often overlooked hues into a kind of worthy technicolour of their own... like Vicente's whitewashed fountain Alexandra speaks of below... and the irridescence of slate can be amazing. Thank you for making me think and appreciate all this. And I very much enjoy the thought of employing a palette of sombre hues to paint a true and beautiful picture - like appreciating the sharpness and purity of black and white photography over colour. Bless you, Kate xx

"i am awash with slate today"... what an image, wow! Indeed, our "colour true" is, so often, one "awash with slate" - and we won't find the light, what our fellow author Jorge Vicente calls the "whitewashed fountain", if we don't come to terms with our "somber shades" first. The metaphors are simply tremendous, dear Jeff - this is exceptional poetry! (Many wholehearted thanks for your amazing comments on my work)
Love,
Alexandra*

wow-a touiching write-good job with the metaphors -

Your pallette may be laden with superb shadows and vapors of sadness,
but your true color is filled with Light!

Thank you for your service to our country as a Marine, Sir.

Bless you, Rhonda

You word painted an exceptional poem that gives the reader images of a variegated truth. Good to read your superb poetry again, Jeff!

Eileen

Darkness yes, but is not dark not just as valid as the more vibrant colors? Wonderful, Jeff. I enjoyed this poem very much.

Jane

Great imagery in this insightful write.

Beautifully imaged Jeff ... and laced masterfully with the emotional philosophic heartbeats of a true seeker. Well done!

Light and Wisdom ...

Powerfully emotive and meaningful and I do appreciate the analogy, Jeff. I can relate to the sentiments that you express here. Thank you for sharing. Love and peace to you,

Regis

Oh my goodness Jeff this some poetry...dark but perfect my friend!!

Seems like we are on the same kinda wave length...on the darkside for sure!!

Love Tinka

This is a wonderful poem, Jeff -- your color palette is full with meaning and I enjoyed this start to finish. Excellent work.
Love,
CJ

You're right Jeff. Your poetry is always top shelf. The ambience of this one is tangible!