In this poem, I wrote in recollection of my vivid feelings when I first met my first love. How did you feel when you met your first love?
The love like a stone
by Choi Paul-Yearn
When my love came to me like a stone thrown in a pond
I felt a tingling heat waved from chest throughout body
Suddenly the sun sprinkled golden dust like in children's pictures
Birds flew over me singing joyfully
Trees danced fluttering with looks like new costumes even in place
All things celebrated me like a prince with new looks.
I could hear the complaints of the crippled flowers by the roadside
Even the feeble whispers of little grass flowers the wind missed
Only after the love opened my ears newly.
I saw the stars twinkle with hope smiling
Noticed even the tears of the plantain flowers trampled by feet.
Only after the love opened my love-eyes newly.
Why do the blades of grass shine the color of themselves
How delicious is the white flesh of the mackerel lying on the sea!
Why are all the stars in the sky shining toward me
How abundant are the fish of the sea!
My love came to make me realize all of the reason of them
All things approached with fresh looks like a mount after rain lifts
I was able to embrace all of them with a warm heart
Only after love came to me with rapturous excitement
I'm glad that stone was not heavy, but made a delightful splash. While I recall the feeling of spotting my first love, it was not like someone as poetic as you. You created lines of similes for what was happening to that abounded in the natural world around you as though you were in some kind of a poetic trance.
Perhaps that's why I was not successful with my first love, I just wasn't poetic enough so that she felt it, too.
i love your piece as well as the imagery you have depicted in it. in my mind, i can hear the birds singing and even almost tasting the white flesh of the mackerel. the last line perfectly summed it all up.
I recently published my 22nd collection of poetry.
The title of the collection is <Love Song 100>.
The works are numbered in a single-titled series about love.
This poem is not a work published in that collection, but I tried to describe in various aspects the ecstatic and excited feelings when I met my first love, which I experienced and everyone experiences.
The love in this poem may be a man or woman, but it may also be Christ, the source of love that we humans have met.
The impression of meeting Christ is more than meeting the love of the opposite sex, but it can also be seen as expressing that emotion as love in a relationship between a man and a woman.
Since the love between God and human beings is sensuous and rational, it can be said that it was described as the love of human relationships so that readers can easily perceive it through their senses.
A Collection of Voices from Around the World is more than just a poetry compilation. It is a partnership of poets from around the globe brought together by an internet poetry forum. That forum, poetrypages.com, has been the home of many a fine poet s
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Perhaps that's why I was not successful with my first love, I just wasn't poetic enough so that she felt it, too.
Ron
Sandie
The title of the collection is <Love Song 100>.
The works are numbered in a single-titled series about love.
This poem is not a work published in that collection, but I tried to describe in various aspects the ecstatic and excited feelings when I met my first love, which I experienced and everyone experiences.
The love in this poem may be a man or woman, but it may also be Christ, the source of love that we humans have met.
The impression of meeting Christ is more than meeting the love of the opposite sex, but it can also be seen as expressing that emotion as love in a relationship between a man and a woman.
Since the love between God and human beings is sensuous and rational, it can be said that it was described as the love of human relationships so that readers can easily perceive it through their senses.