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Working Draft
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This is part of a poem... I am having problems with one stanza...your feedback is appreciated...My feeling is that the second stanza has too much in it...
First draft: Deep within the valley a glint of light revealed a gentle flowing river near a field of daffodils... (Decided to stay with the first version) Thanks!

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Reviewed by Peter Paton

Reviewed on April 19, 2026

This first draft is perfect, Linda.

It flows with sweetness and truth.

Peter

Reviewed by La Belle Rouge Poetess Of The Heart

Reviewed on March 2, 2007

I like the first better, more concise but conveys the image well.

Reviewed by K. Mulroney

Reviewed on March 1, 2007

Read perfect to me. The beat is right on target. Don't mess with perfecton!

Reviewed by Laura Mayer (Reader)

Reviewed on February 27, 2007

I agree with Fee, I like the flow and rhythm of the first stanza. Hope this helps.
Hugs, Laura

Reviewed by Felix Perry

Reviewed on February 27, 2007

I like both versions but the first would be my preference, it has a nicer flow and rythem to it when read out loud.

Fee

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