My original lyrics in a songwriters contest in San Diego and now a :First draft" vocal soundtrack. What's your opinion:
Any hope to hear this on the radio this year?
Radio station KPRI FM in San Diego has proposed the song title "Every Second"
to the San Diego Songwriters Meetup, the job of its members to write the lyrics
and melody to match. Of an expected 40 entrants, the winner's performance in
will be broadcast in the station's Sunday evening"Homegrown Hour."
I wrote the lyrics for the dark ballad "Every Second" in mid-January, 2012. Now
in mid-March, 2012, I've just received a "first draft" soundtrack of instrumentation
and vocal by Jim Wright of San Diego County (who says he's working to improve
his melody and shorten his vocal closer to 3 minutes total).
Wow.. this is a work of pure excellence, Rchard! I am also a songwriter, so I get you.. and your message is powerful: the man asks forgiveness "in religion he just found" It wasn't sincere, or rooted in Christ. It was just speaking words the pastor led him through... offering him a final opportunity for Salvation.
May everyone who reads it, or hears it - get it: that the Devil is real, too. And without regeneration and forgiveness of sin, man is doomed to eternity in hell... no GOD.. absence of Light. Only torment forever.
I applaud you, my gifted Brother, and also the talents of Jim Wright.
Actually, the tune put me in mind of Hotel California, by the Eagles. Another dark ballad.
Richard, you should have learned a lesson from Tom Dooley. ("Poor boy, he's bound to die.")
I have no idea how to "hear" this in your voice, as Micki mentioned. However, I thought it was a compelling story, well told. The devil should be crying, though, if you found forgiveness in Christ while waiting on Death Row.
Excellent writing!
Richard, this poem (song lyrics) is really wonderful. It is the best you've done. The story grabbed me and kept me enthralled right to the end. I could just vision a man sitting in jail counting those minutes and seconds until he would take that last walk to the death room where he would have his last breath. If this is put to music, it will be a winner. Congratulations on your having written such an excellent write.
Inspirational poetry, written from the heart and soul. Verses that are well-suited for reading on a rainy day and that are guaranteed to bring a smile to your face.
“The woman or man who is a poet, or fiction writer, or playwright, or all of these, is engaged constantly in a jazz ballet of vocabularies, passions, genders, histories, perspectives, death, love, and life. The music of revelation announces itself to
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May everyone who reads it, or hears it - get it: that the Devil is real, too. And without regeneration and forgiveness of sin, man is doomed to eternity in hell... no GOD.. absence of Light. Only torment forever.
I applaud you, my gifted Brother, and also the talents of Jim Wright.
Actually, the tune put me in mind of Hotel California, by the Eagles. Another dark ballad.
Well done, good and faithful servant!
Love & Hugs, Rhonda
I have no idea how to "hear" this in your voice, as Micki mentioned. However, I thought it was a compelling story, well told. The devil should be crying, though, if you found forgiveness in Christ while waiting on Death Row.
Excellent writing!
Connie
Richard, this poem (song lyrics) is really wonderful. It is the best you've done. The story grabbed me and kept me enthralled right to the end. I could just vision a man sitting in jail counting those minutes and seconds until he would take that last walk to the death room where he would have his last breath. If this is put to music, it will be a winner. Congratulations on your having written such an excellent write.
All my best,
Micki