what an insightful and soulful write. loved the rhyme scheme as well, it looks like it was a difficult write, but it came out wonderfully! flows nicely, with a good, thoughtful message.
Creative and thought-provoking. Assuming it is autobiography,
you may be "running on empty" in terms of the relationship, but
you are definitely running with a full tank creatively and
intellectually. B r a v a !! 'Pea' <3
Dan,
Asking me to take an entire poem and condense it to a sentence or two I am not sure is fair but hey I like a challenge as much as the next women so here we go.. it's about a jaded women with some communication problems and a man that "GETS" it but she is not sure she can be everything that he deserves or needs. phew,,,,,so, how did I do with the Reader's Digest version? :) and thank you for your comment. I do look forward to reading you again but I see you are slipping..you didn't mention the typo.
Reviewed by Dan Rains (Reader)
Reviewed on November 13, 2005
Robin,
This says a lot. Trouble is that I'm not sure what you are trying to say. Please elaborate. Whether you chose to or not, it does have great rhyme.
Dan
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Well done.
you may be "running on empty" in terms of the relationship, but
you are definitely running with a full tank creatively and
intellectually. B r a v a !! 'Pea' <3
Regis
Asking me to take an entire poem and condense it to a sentence or two I am not sure is fair but hey I like a challenge as much as the next women so here we go.. it's about a jaded women with some communication problems and a man that "GETS" it but she is not sure she can be everything that he deserves or needs. phew,,,,,so, how did I do with the Reader's Digest version? :) and thank you for your comment. I do look forward to reading you again but I see you are slipping..you didn't mention the typo.
This says a lot. Trouble is that I'm not sure what you are trying to say. Please elaborate. Whether you chose to or not, it does have great rhyme.
Dan
Eileen
"TRANSPARENT ILLUSIONS" diffuses wise thinking and shows how to rinse the soul with essences of wisdom.
This composition pays its poetic dues with diamond of poetic beauty
through the lines of "TRANSPARENT ILLUSIONS".
I salute You, Poet!
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
Apprentice-poet by the Grace of The Mother-Poet
Sandie May Angel a.k.a. Sandie Angel :o)