Nicely written piece that makes we wonder, were we meant to live this way? You express here what I think we all feel as we are expected to grow into the "real" world.
Exquisite writing and feeling. You have capture the malady of being human. Keep writing and posting.
Bobbi
Reviewed by La Belle Rouge (Reader)
Reviewed on July 23, 2002
Fritz, try not to think about, find you and let the rest of the world find itself! Only one thing wrong with your portfolio, need a lot more of this outstanding poetry there!
Reviewed by Elizabeth Taylor (Reader)
Reviewed on May 8, 2002
Perfect. Perfect form and simplistic. Loved it! ~E
Powerful writing.....all those feelings just tumbling along with your words like dominoes...very good rythym all the way through!
Reviewed by Hanley Harding (Reader)
Reviewed on April 23, 2002
Dear Fritz; sounds like the wonderful world of business to me! Hanley
Reviewed by Lorrieann Russell (Reader)
Reviewed on April 23, 2002
I've had nights like this. This poem gives me the impression of lying in bed, but the bed is on wheels on a gradually increasing incline, and the wheels are rolling faster and faster and there's nothing to do but hold on and ride it out.
Reviewed by Clint Gaige
Reviewed on April 23, 2002
This one is pretty good...solid flow, nice wording, and great meaning.
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Daydreaming, scheming
Swirling confusion
Silently screaming...
...I hear ya!
Profound piece..saved this one!
Vesna:)
Lisa
Bobbi
good job!
Clint
When I Am Alone I Find My Self!!
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