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Wally
by Susan K. de Vegter → (All Poetry by Susan K. de Vegter)
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Up to the Challenge tonight ED!!!


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I went grocery shopping at WalMart
Much to my own chagrin
I bought stuff that I needed this minute
Then while standing in line met a friend
It came up my leg in a second
Scooted right under my skirt
Around my waste he did travel
Then ducked up under my shirt
He peeked from under my clevage
His snout was furry and fun
He was ready to travel these smaller alps
And decided that he wouldn't run
He was after the gouda I prized for myself
Then let out a wee little sneeze
His whiskers tickled my fancy
I almost went to my knees
I checked out smiling like crazy
While the cashier was giggling a fit
She looked like a mad scientist all crazy
Then reached for a broom to hit
She whished and swooshed like a turbine
Then let out a huge frightening sneeze
I saved a mouse named Wally
Then he and I went home with our cheese.
 

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 Reviews of "Wally"
Reviewed by Ronald Hull
Reviewed on October 17, 2007
This is the big cheese, not the least bit cheezy.

Ron

Reviewed by Walter Jones
Reviewed on October 2, 2007
Clever crafted well, a smile with warmth, and twist in message, enjoyed.. walt

Reviewed by Taylor Ryan
Reviewed on October 1, 2007
You rocked the challenge with this clever cutie Susan...not to mention the well crafted rhyme and meter. You set a pretty high standard. Gouda one!
xo Taylor

Reviewed by William Bonilla
Reviewed on September 30, 2007
Now that was cheezy!
Well done Susan
Cute & funny
Peace & love be with you

William

Reviewed by Randall Barfield
Reviewed on September 29, 2007
'mad scientist all crazy'. this is funny, really. Too cute. Thanks for sharing it. Cheers

Reviewed by Felix Perry
Reviewed on September 29, 2007
Oh my Susan, damn lucky Felix the Cat wasn't around or you would have had more whiskers up under your skirt purring with delight.

Loved this one and a defiante contender for the prize list...

fee

Reviewed by SHERRY HEIM
Reviewed on September 29, 2007
This is fantastic, Susan, I cannot imagine how it could have been done any better. Excellent job!! Okay, I am off to Wal-Mart to see if Wally has any relatives at the one in my neighborhood. I would gladly share my Tillamook cheese for one very sexy little mousey sneeze.

Take care,

Sherry

Reviewed by Kate Burnside
Reviewed on September 29, 2007
This is pure delight, Susan! A cute little furry thing giving you one big smile... glad I expressed myself correctly here! As mothers of children who been through the stage of these kinds of household pets, think we can all relate and know the feeling... at least inside the shirt... your hilarious words brings the sensations right back. Fantastic tight rhythm and flawless rhyme and metre. Gives me the itch to twitch. Cats' whiskers' stuff in the cheesey poetry department... a strong contender for the challenge. Love, Kate xx

Reviewed by Ann Scarborough
Reviewed on September 29, 2007
Wally is a great name for a mouse out for gouda! Just don't share the wine with him, for then he would be a gouda tipsy mouse!
Love this,
annie

Reviewed by Tinka Boukes
Reviewed on September 29, 2007
Wally quite Micely Nice!!

Got cheezy!!

Love Tinka :)


Reviewed by Mr. Ed
Reviewed on September 29, 2007
I saved a mouse named Wally
Then he and I went home with our cheese.

You are a True Modern Day Heroine! And this is a marvelous 'Cheese Poem' Entry!!

Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader)
Reviewed on September 29, 2007
Wonderful and wholesome poetry, Susan, mice and cheese, a combination that is hard to beat . . .

Reviewed by Amber Moonstone
Reviewed on September 29, 2007
Susan,
This is such a cute poem. Why don't I have this much fun at WalMart?
I enjoyed this very much.
Peace, Love, and Light,
Amber "V"

Reviewed by Walt Hardester
Reviewed on September 29, 2007
Cheeses and Sneezes sent Susan smiling all the way home.
Very cute one this.

Walt

Reviewed on September 29, 2007
This is sweet, Susan; very well done! BRAVA!

(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Tx., Karen Lynn. :D

Reviewed by Ted Bossis
Reviewed on September 29, 2007
Of mice & men it's the sneeze that saved the day & All go their merry way *.....love TedSo

Reviewed by E T Waldron
Reviewed on September 28, 2007
Well this takes the cheese for sure!;-)Delightful, inventive and a joy to read!

ET

Reviewed on September 28, 2007
Awwwwwwwww: Susan, you're a friend to cheese AND mice. :) Well done!

(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.

Reviewed by John Leko
Reviewed on September 28, 2007
...seems like you were quite the femme feta-le...at WalMart.
John

Reviewed by Karen Vanderlaan
Reviewed on September 28, 2007
oh, so clever!

Reviewed by Kathy Armijo
Reviewed on September 28, 2007
Wally? Gouda' given him a name like ... oh, heck, Wally will do.

Quite the adventurer, just for a piece of cheese.

Kathy


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