Sunrise like sunset dance playfully through me,
With visions soft of dangling eyes, my heart.
I caress you in my mind, sighing happy
That touching you suggests fear to depart.
Morning and evening are but the same time,
For each becomes celestial space for us.
Like fragrant flowers at their dancing prime,
Your silence loud in its strong warm adjust.
Illusions are always vague and unclear,
Of happy and sad, longing and desire.
Of things left vacant other desperate cheer,
Through what we were and what we expired.
My love, you will always be the sun to me,
With heart inclined to constant memory.
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Reviews of "Sunrise Like Sunset Dance Playfully Through Me"
Romantic and sweet. So good to know there are a lot of other romantics who refuse to give in to crassness and cynicism.
x:)x Phyllis x:)x
N: Jerry's right about the dangling eyes; maybe something like "with visions of your soft, tantalizing eyes?" Maybe w/o soft? Just a thought. Don't mean to meddle!
Each person is but a grain of sand resting beside the sea. This thought sets the tone for Jill Eisnaugle’s latest poetry collection, Beside Still Waters.
x:)x Phyllis x:)x
N: Jerry's right about the dangling eyes; maybe something like "with visions of your soft, tantalizing eyes?" Maybe w/o soft? Just a thought. Don't mean to meddle!
Ron
Other than that the sonnet is well-written and lovely. I'd seriously try to get rid of the dangling eyes though.